Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Overall, there aretotal six groups of men and women with diferent ages. Women covers higher proportion in five groups than men.

Group of age from 15 to 24 has 52.8% of men and 47.7 women. At the age 25 to 36, men has 42.2% and women accounted for 48.9%.

People of age at 35 to 44 at 39.5% of men and 52.5 % of women. In the age of 45 to 54, women registerd then at 53.3% which is the highest proportion of total groups and men at the 43.1%.

Age group of 55 to 64 has 45.1% of men and 53% of women respectively. The group of over 65 people is approximately equal proportion with small difference of 0.6%.

Women were more physically active than m

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The student covers most parts of the task by reporting data for both genders across the age groups and making some comparisons. However, the overview is extremely weak and fails to capture the main overall trends or key features of the chart, merely stating that there are six groups. Furthermore, the response is cut off at the very end ('Women were more physically active than m'), which prevents full development. Data points are generally reported accurately, such as noting that women registered the highest proportion in the 45 to 54 age group at 53.3%. To reach a higher band, the student needs to write a more comprehensive overview highlighting major trends and ensure the response is fully completed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response shows an attempt at logical organization by breaking down the data by age groups. However, paragraphing is fragmented, with several very short, single-sentence paragraphs. Cohesive devices are minimal and basic, and the logical progression is disrupted by the abrupt ending of the text where the final sentence trails off unfinished. Referencing is sometimes unclear, for example in sentences like 'Group of age from 15 to 24 has 52.8% of men and 47.7 women.' Overall, the arrangement lacks smooth transitions between data points and groups.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, relying heavily on standard reporting verbs and percentages (e.g., 'percentage', 'proportion', 'men', 'women'). There are noticeable spelling and word choice errors, such as 'diferent' instead of different, 'covers' instead of accounts for or represents, and 'registerd' instead of registered. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the basic data points, it lacks the range and precision expected for higher bands, and these errors occasionally distract the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The student demonstrates a limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent structural errors. Examples include missing prepositions or nouns ('and 47.7 women'), awkward phrasing ('Group of age from 15 to 24 has...'), and subject-verb agreement or collocation issues ('men has', 'People of age at 35 to 44 at 39.5% of men'). Complex sentences are rarely attempted successfully, and punctuation and phrasing errors persist throughout the text, leading to frequent grammatical strain for the reader.

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