Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australian male and female in different age of people who did excerise daily in 2010.
overall, 15 to 24 years men have high range while the 45 to 54 age of women have also a massive amount of percentage. While 35 to 44 years male have less amount of percentage for the physical activity.
To begin with, 15 to 24 year old men have huge amount of percentage about 52.8 and women have 47.7 amount of percentage. Male are 25 to 34 years old people have 42.2 percent and women 48.9 percent. 35 to 44 age of men are daily activity is about 39.5 percent and women is 52.5.
Furthermore, male is about 45 to 54 they have 43.1 percentage and women have 53.3 percent. In addition, 55 to 64 years old men have regular activity is about 45.1 and women 53. Moreover, in 65 and over men and women have same amount of percentage.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the prompt by reporting figures from the bar chart regarding Australian men and women's physical activity in 2010. However, the selection and reporting of data are flawed. The overview is weak, ungrammatical, and fails to capture the broader trends effectively, merely stating that 15 to 24 year old men have a 'high range'. Furthermore, the body paragraphs read like a mechanical list of raw data without clear comparative analysis (e.g., failing to highlight that women's participation peaked in middle age while men's peaked at the extremes). There are also misinterpretations, such as stating that in the 65 and over group, men and women have the same amount of percentage, whereas the chart shows 46.7% for males and 47.1% for females. This places the response at a Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is organized into paragraphs, including an introduction and body paragraphs that correspond roughly to different age groups. However, the progression of ideas is hindered by repetitive phrasing and poor cohesive devices. Phrases like 'To begin with', 'Furthermore', and 'In addition' are used mechanically without contributing to a smooth logical flow. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the overall structure lacks a cohesive overview that synthesizes the main trends of the chart. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal cohesion within sentences is frequently disrupted by awkward syntax and punctuation errors. These issues limit the response to a Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, relying heavily on phrases like 'amount of percentage', 'huge amount', and 'massive amount'. There are numerous word choice errors and unnatural collocations, such as 'Australian male and female in different age of people who did excerise daily' instead of 'Australian men and women across different age groups who undertook regular physical activity'. Spelling errors also appear, such as 'excerise'. The lexical range is limited and barely adequate to convey the basic data points, fitting the criteria for a Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The text contains a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences attempt simple or faulty complex forms, and there are frequent structural errors that impede readability. Examples include 'overall, 15 to 24 years men have high range while the 45 to 54 age of women have also a massive amount of percentage' and 'Male are 25 to 34 years old people have 42.2 percent'. Subject-verb agreement is frequently violated, prepositions are misused, and word order is often unnatural. Due to the high frequency of grammatical errors and lack of complex sentence control, a score of 4.5 is appropriate.
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