Band 7.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 7.5)
The bar chart illustrates the percentages of Australian men and women in six different age groups who engaged in regular physical activity in 2010.
Overall, women had higher participation rates than men in all age groups except those aged 15–24. The highest proportion of physically active women was in the 45–54 age group, while the lowest proportion of active men was recorded among those aged 35–44.
Among people aged 15–24, 52.8% of men participated in regular physical activity, compared with 47.7% of women. In the 25–34 age group, the figure for men fell to 42.2%, whereas the percentage for women increased to 48.9%. A similar pattern was seen among those aged 35–44, with 39.5% of men exercising regularly, compared with 52.5% of women.
In the older age groups, male participation increased gradually, reaching 43.1% among those aged 45–54, 45.1% among those aged 55–64 and 46.7% among people aged 65 and over. By contrast, the corresponding figures for women were 53.3%, 53% and 47.1%, respectively.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 7.5 |
| Overall | 7.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.5
The student fully addresses all parts of the task by accurately summarising the main features of the bar chart and making relevant comparisons between men and women across different age groups. An appropriate and clear overview is provided in the second paragraph, highlighting that women had higher participation rates overall except in the 15–24 age bracket. Furthermore, the specific data points cited, such as '52.8% of men participated' in the youngest group and '53.3%' for women aged 45–54, are factually correct and accurately reflected from the provided data. There are no omissions or misinterpretations of the visual information, demonstrating a well-developed response that satisfies all the requirements of Task 1.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.5
The response is logically organised with a clear progression of information. Each paragraph serves a distinct purpose, moving from the introduction and overview into detailed body paragraphs that break down the data by age cohorts. Cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'by contrast', 'whereas', and 'compared with' are used effectively and naturally to link ideas and contrast data series. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the overview from the specific data breakdowns. Referencing is clear throughout, ensuring that the reader can easily follow the comparisons between male and female participation rates.
Lexical Resource: Band 6.5
The student demonstrates a sufficient and appropriate range of vocabulary for this task type. Less common and precise items such as 'proportion', 'participation rates', 'engaged in', and 'gradually' are used accurately. Collocations are natural, as seen in expressions like 'regular physical activity' and 'older age groups'. There are no significant spelling or word-choice errors that impede communication. While the vocabulary is well-suited and precise, it stops just short of the wide, highly flexible range of uncommon lexical items typically required for a Band 8.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 7.5
The writing exhibits a good variety of complex sentence structures, incorporating subordinate clauses, participial phrases, and comparative structures effectively (e.g., 'while the lowest proportion of active men was recorded among those aged 35–44' and 'reaching 43.1% among those aged 45–54'). The majority of sentences are error-free, and grammatical control is strong throughout. Punctuation is accurate, and punctuation errors are absent. The control over grammar and syntax clearly aligns with the Band 8 descriptor, showing rare minor slips at most.
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