Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph illustrates the comparison between men and women in different age groups in Austrailia who did regular exercise in 2010.
Overall, young man recorded the more figure than young womens, while adult womens recorded figures are increased with age but on the other hand adult men figures decrease. It is also noticeable that old men and womens approximately same figures of regular activity.
Young people ranges from 15 to 24 men has 52.8% and women has just 47.7% involve in exercise.In adult age between 25 to 64 women slowly increase their physical activties while men deacreasing in exercise.At the end of age 65 and over women and men approximately 47% doing exercies.
In adult age from 25 to 34, 48.9% womens doing exercise and just 42.2% mens doing involve in physical activity. Between 35 to 44 women goes to 52.5% and mens down to 39.5% who participating in physical involvment. After that, at the age of 45 to 54 and 55 to 64 womens and mens percentage nealry close like 53% womens and 44 % mens are doing physical activity.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover the main features of the chart, noting general differences between men and women across age groups. However, there are notable inaccuracies in reporting the data. For instance, the text states that 'young man recorded the more figure than young womens,' whereas the chart shows that males (52.8%) outvoted females (47.7%) in the 15-24 age group, but this trend reverses or fluctuates in other brackets. Furthermore, the overview is somewhat simplistic and contains awkward phrasing. While the student identifies key groupings like 15-24 and 65 and over, the support lacks precision and contains repetitive data points. This corresponds to a Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay has a basic structure, including an introduction, a brief overview, and supporting body paragraphs. However, progression is frequently disrupted by awkward sequencing and repetitive reporting of the same age groups across sentences. Cohesive devices are either missing, inadequate, or repetitive, as seen in phrases like 'on the other hand adult men figures decrease' and 'In adult age from 25 to 34...'. Paragraphing is attempted, but sentences lack smooth logical flow and logical transitions between ideas. These features align with a Band 5.0 descriptor.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and often repetitive, featuring frequent word-formation errors and inaccurate collocations. Examples include spelling errors such as 'Austrailia', 'womens', 'activties', 'deacreasing', and 'nealry'. The student struggles with parts of speech, writing 'mens doing involve in physical activity' and 'who participating in physical involvment'. There is little evidence of less common lexical items, and the restricted range limits precision. This performance sits firmly at Band 4.5, rounded to Band 5.0 due to adequate communication of basic concepts.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response contains a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex structures are consistently marred by severe grammatical errors, missing auxiliary verbs, and incorrect prepositions. Examples include 'young man recorded the more figure than young womens', 'old men and womens approximately same figures', and 'women goes to 52.5% and mens down to 39.5%'. Punctuation is also weak, with missing spaces after periods and awkward clauses. Frequent errors cause noticeable difficulty for the reader, fitting the Band 4.5/5.0 criteria.
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