Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
The bar chart compares the proportion of daily physical activities that were done by Australian males and females of different age groups in the year 2010.
Overall, it is clear that the percentage of Australian men showed a gradual decline, while the proportion of women increased and made up the highest share in the middle-aged group.
In detail, in 2010, 52.8% of physical activities were consisted by Australian males who were aged 15-24, it then declined to reach 39.5% of 35-44 aged individuals who were least interested in doing everyday activities. After that, the figure rose gradually at about 46.7% by 65 and over aged gentlemen.
On the other hand, females of age 15-24 comprised 47.7%, and followed by the age 45-54, women made up 53.3%, which was a large proportion in doing daily physical work. Lastly, the trend showed a slight decline to approximately 53% and 47.1% in the 55-64 and 65 and over age groups of ladies, respectively.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5
The student successfully covers all parts of the task by selecting and reporting the main features of the bar chart while making relevant comparisons between male and female participation rates. An overview is provided, highlighting the general downward trend for men and the peak for women in the middle-aged groups. Figures are appropriately cited, such as the peak female participation at 53.3% for the 45-54 age group and the low point for males at 39.5% for 35-44 year olds. However, the data represents regular physical activity rather than 'daily physical activities' or 'physical work,' which slightly misinterprets the nature of the data. Despite this slight semantic inaccuracy, the task is well addressed, earning a solid Band 7.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5
The response is logically organised into four clear paragraphs, featuring an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs detailing the male and female trends separately. Cohesive devices are used adequately, such as 'Overall,' 'In detail,' and 'On the other hand,' though some transitions and referencing feel slightly mechanical. Progression is maintained throughout the text, allowing the reader to easily follow the comparisons between age groups. Paragraphing is used appropriately and supports the overall structure. For these reasons, the response meets the criteria for Band 7.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 6.0
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully using terms like 'proportion,' 'gradual decline,' and 'comprised.' However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and phrasing, such as 'daily physical activities' instead of 'regular physical activity,' and 'were consisted by' instead of 'consisted of' or 'comprised.' Less common vocabulary is attempted with mixed success, and occasional awkward collocations prevent the response from reaching a higher band. Overall, the lexical range is sufficient to communicate the main points clearly, aligning with Band 6.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0
The response features a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating attempts at relative clauses and participial phrases, such as 'Australian males who were aged 15-24' and 'women made up 53.3%, which was a large proportion.' However, there are notable grammatical errors and awkward passive constructions, such as 'were consisted by' and 'of 35-44 aged individuals who were least interested' (which misinterprets the statistical data as a measure of interest). Punctuation is generally acceptable, and errors do not impede overall communication, placing this response securely at Band 6.0.
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