Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart depicts the ratio of Australian male and female with differents ages doing physical activity in regular routine in 2010.
Overall, the proportion of Australian women were significantly increased in the given time period bwteen all the ages group.
Started with the age group between 15 to 24 year, there was a huge rise in the number of male who done regular physical activity with the ratio of 52.8%, while women with the ratio of 47.7%. on the other hand, percentage of women had significantly increased between all the remaninig age groups, range from 25 to 65 and above that.
In the age group of 25 to 34, the proportion of women were higher then men with the value of 48.9% and 42.2% respectively. And there was a gradual increase in the ratio of women ages from 35 to 65 and over that. And the most crucial increase is taking place in the age group of 45 to 54, where women majority touches the peak of 53.3%, which was record hight on the graph.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the task by reporting on the given bar chart, but the response suffers from significant inaccuracies regarding the data. For instance, the claim that the proportion of women "significantly increased... between all the remaining age groups" is factually incorrect according to the chart, where female participation actually dips at the oldest age group (47.1% down from 53%). Furthermore, the overview is poorly formed and lacks a clear, accurate summary of the main trends. The student misses several key comparisons between genders across different age brackets. Therefore, the response aligns best with Band 5, as it addresses the task only partially and contains notable misconceptions about the visual data.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the organization and progression are disjointed. The opening overview sentence is vague and grammatically flawed. The transition phrases used, such as "Started with the age group" and "on the other hand," are awkward and fail to logically link the ideas. Paragraphing is attempted, but the body paragraphs lack clear internal progression, jumping between different age groups without a cohesive narrative. Pronoun referencing is also problematic in places, such as "where women majority touches the peak." These issues place the response firmly in Band 5 for Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is quite basic and repetitive, with noticeable errors in word choice and morphology. Examples include "with differents ages", "regular routine", "bwteen", and "record hight". The student attempts some less common vocabulary, such as "proportion", "gradual increase", and "peak", but these are often accompanied by collocation errors or awkward phrasing (e.g., "women majority touches the peak"). Lexical range is limited, and spelling/word-formation errors require the reader to occasionally pause, which is characteristic of Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response features a very limited range of grammatical structures, and attempts at complex sentences frequently result in errors. Examples of grammatical inaccuracies include "the proportion of Australian women were significantly increased" (subject-verb agreement and passive/active confusion), "number of male who done regular physical activity" (missing plural/article and tense error), and "women ages from 35 to 65" (awkward phrasing). Frequent errors in basic grammar, verb forms, and preposition usage cause some difficulty for the reader throughout the text, corresponding to a Band 5 score.
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