Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The chart show the percentage of Australian men and women who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The information by selecting and reporting is summarized,

In this diagram show that the percentage of Australian men and women doing regular physical activity in 2010.In 2010 the age of 15 to 24 peoples doing regular physical activity in the percentage of 47 to 52. In the age of 25 to 34 peoples doing regular physical activity in the percentage of 42 to 48.In the age of 35 to 44 peoples doing regular physical activity in the percentage of 39 to 52.In the age od 45 to 54 peoples doing regular physical activity in the percentage of 43 to 53.In the age of 55 to 64 peoples doing regular physical activity in the percentage of 45 to 53.In the age of 65 and above peoples doing regular physical activity in the percentage of 46 to 47.In the age of 35 to 44 doing large number of physical activities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response attempts to address the chart showing the percentage of Australian men and women doing regular physical activity in 2010. However, the task achievement is significantly limited by repetitive and awkward phrasing, as well as a lack of a clear overall overview. The student lists the data ranges for each age group rather than reporting key features and making accurate, coherent comparisons. Furthermore, the figures cited (such as "the percentage of 47 to 52") reflect ranges rather than distinct data points for men and women separately, indicating a misunderstanding of how to read and present the data from the chart. Consequently, the response only partially addresses the prompt and fails to fully develop a well-structured summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The text suffers from severe organizational and structural flaws. There is an absence of proper paragraphing, with most sentences strung together without logical progression or clear overarching structure. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, resulting in a disjointed reading experience. For instance, introductory sentences like "The information by selecting and reporting is summarized" are ungrammatical and fail to guide the reader into the data. Referencing is unclear, and the mechanical repetition of sentence patterns ("In the age of...") impedes the logical flow of information.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is extremely basic, highly repetitive, and restricted to simple terms such as "percentage", "men and women", and "physical activity". There are noticeable vocabulary limitations and awkward word choices, such as "peoples doing" instead of "people engaging in" or "adults participating in". The student struggles to employ less common lexical items or paraphrase the prompt effectively. While basic communication of numbers is attempted, the range of vocabulary is inadequate for a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and almost all attempts at more complex formations result in severe errors, such as missing verbs ("The chart show", "In this diagram show that"), incorrect prepositions, and improper word forms ("od" instead of "of"). Frequent grammatical errors cause constant difficulty for the reader and distort meaning, placing the response firmly in the lower band categories for grammar.

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