Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustarate the percentage of both gender of different age group did regular physical activity in 2010

The percentage vary from 40 to 60 physical activity of both gender.In age group both gender slightly rise or declineing in percentage.

In 15 to 24 age of men did more physical activity then women and other age in between 25 to 34 women won the competion of excercise then men and then again in between age of 35 to 44 women won wheares men did 39 .5 percent and women did 52.5 percent.

And again 45 to 54 age of people women did great and won 10 points og percentage then men.

In 55to 64 where again women did 53 wheares men did 45.1 percent exercise and over 65 women did slightly higher then men did exercise

In overall women did more then men did the physical activity in 2010

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The candidate attempts to summarise the main features of the chart, noting details such as the percentages for men and women across different age groups. However, the response suffers from significant inaccuracies in reporting data. For instance, the text claims that 'women won the competion of excercise' in the 55 to 64 age group where women did 53 while men did 45.1, but in reality, women are higher across several groups (or lower in others, such as 15-24 where males are 52.8 and females 47.7). The overview is very simplistic ('In overall women did more then men did the physical activity in 2010'), which is factually incorrect overall since participation rates fluctuate between genders across age brackets. Because of inaccurate data reporting and underdeveloped task fulfilment, it meets the criteria for Band 4.5 to 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The text lacks proper paragraphing, consisting almost entirely of a single block of text with fragmented line breaks. There is a lack of logical overall progression, and cohesive devices are rudimentary, repetitive, or inaccurate (e.g., 'And again 45 to 54 age of people...', 'In 55to 64 where again women did...'). Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparisons smoothly. The organisation of data lacks a structured approach, moving back and forth without clear grouping or overview. This performance fits the Band 4.0 descriptors.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, featuring frequent misspellings and inappropriate informal phrasing such as 'illustarate', 'competion', 'excercise', and 'won'. There is a very limited range of appropriate lexical items related to data reporting (such as verbs for trends or adjectives for scale). Word choice is often awkward or incorrect, causing strain for the reader. The lexical resource demonstrated is weak and aligns closely with Band 4.0 descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response displays a very limited range of sentence structures, with frequent and severe grammatical errors throughout. Sentences are often malformed, lacking verbs, or containing incorrect prepositions and tense usage (e.g., 'The percentage vary from 40 to 60 physical activity of both gender', 'In age group both gender slightly rise or declineing in percentage'). Punctuation is largely neglected, and basic subject-verb agreement is frequently violated. These frequent errors cause noticeable difficulty for the reader, placing the response firmly at Band 4.0.

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