Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This bar chart shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. The chart is divided into 6 age groups.
In 2010, 58.2% of Australian men between the age of 15 to 24 doing regular physical activity and the percentage of women who are doing regular physical activity is 47.7. The next group is between age of 25 to 34 and in this group 42.2% of men and 48.9% of women are doing regular physical activity. In this age group the percentage of women is more than men who are doing regular physical activity. From the age of 35 to 44, 39.5% of men and 52.5% of women are involved in regular physical activity. 43.1% of men and 53.3% of women are doing regular physical activity between the age of 45 to 54. The next group of age which we are going to discuss is between 55 to 64, in this group 45.1% of men and 53% of women are involved in regular physical activity. The last group of age is 65 over, in this group the percentage of women and men who are doing regular physical activity is approximately same. In this group 46.7% of men and 47.1% women are involved in regular physical activity.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to report the data from the chart, but there are notable errors in data transcription. For instance, the student states that 58.2% of men aged 15 to 24 did regular physical activity, whereas the correct figure on the chart is 52.8%. Furthermore, the response lacks a clear overview, which is a key requirement for Academic Task 1. While the student goes through the age groups sequentially, listing almost every single data point, the lack of an overarching summary and the inclusion of inaccurate figures pull the score down to Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is organized chronologically through the age groups, but the paragraphing is very weak. The entire body of data is crammed into a single, massive paragraph after the introductory sentence. This results in a monotonous and mechanical listing of figures (e.g., 'The next group is between age of... The next group of age which we are going to discuss is...'). Cohesive devices are repetitive and basic. Although there is a logical progression from youngest to oldest age brackets, the lack of paragraphing and poor mechanical cohesion restrict this to a Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is repetitive and basic, relying heavily on formulas like 'percentage of men and women who are doing regular physical activity' across almost every sentence. There is little attempt to use less common lexical items or synonyms (e.g., repeating 'involved in regular physical activity' constantly). Word choice and phrasing are sometimes unnatural, such as 'The next group of age which we are going to discuss is...'. However, the vocabulary is adequate to communicate the basic topic, earning a Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writing contains a limited range of grammatical structures, heavily relying on simple and awkward compound-complex sentences. There are several noticeable grammatical errors, such as 'between the age of 15 to 24 doing regular physical activity' (missing verb/tense agreement) and 'approximately same' (missing 'the'). Other errors include awkward phrasing like 'The last group of age is 65 over'. Because errors occur frequently and some sentences are awkwardly formed, the grammar aligns with Band 5.0.
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