Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of male and female citizens of Australia in different age groups from (15 years to above 65 years old) who performed physical activities in 2010 on regular bases.
overall the female group domenates the male group except teenage group of men
The 15 to 24 years old musculin group was higher than feminen group. 52.8% and 47.7% respectively. Meanwhile the 25 to 34 years old marture age people are 42.2% for men and 48.9% for women. furthermore 35 to 44 age Australian Citizens were 39.5% for men and 52.5% for women in year 2010.
In the age group from 45 to above 65, womens clearly shows more interst as compared the men in exirse. 45 to 54 year old men were 43.1% and female were 53.3% which was the highest figeo of the bar chart. 55 to 64 age individuals were 45.1% male & 53% women. while the over 65 community has almost same figer. 46.7% and 47.1%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The student manages to cover the main features of the chart, reporting specific data points for both men and women across the different age groups. Key comparisons are made, such as noting that men had higher participation in the 15 to 24 age group while women dominated most other age brackets, and identifying 45 to 54 year old females at 53.3% as the highest figure on the chart. However, the overview is extremely weak, consisting of a single unpunctuated sentence ("overall the female group domenates the male group except teenage group of men") which lacks proper formatting and fails to adequately summarise the broader trends. Furthermore, there are some data reading inaccuracies; for instance, the writer incorrectly states that women were higher across the 45 to above 65 category, missing that men actually had higher participation in the 65 and over group (46.7% vs 47.1% for women, which are nearly identical rather than showing a female dominance). These shortcomings place this response firmly in Band 5.5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response shows some logical organisation by following the age groups chronologically from youngest to oldest, and basic cohesive devices like "Meanwhile", "furthermore", and "while" are used to link ideas. However, paragraphing is poorly handled, with erratic line breaks and a lack of proper introductory and concluding structure. The overview is awkwardly placed and unpunctuated. Cohesive devices are sometimes mechanical or repetitive, and referencing is occasionally unclear, such as shifting abruptly between percentages and people without clear antecedents. These organizational flaws restrict the text to a Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for conveying basic numerical data, employing terms like "percentage", "community", and "individuals". However, there are numerous spelling errors and awkward lexical choices throughout the text, such as "domenates" (dominates), "musculin" (masculine), "feminen" (feminine), "marture" (mature), "interst" (interest), "exirse" (exercise), and "figeo" or "figer" (figure). The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive, and these persistent misspellings and word-choice inaccuracies occasionally cause strain for the reader, placing the response at a Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, incorporating relative clauses and comparative forms. However, grammatical accuracy is weak, with frequent errors including punctuation failures (e.g., lowercase letters at the start of sentences, missing full stops), fragments, and subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., "womens clearly shows more interst"). Many sentences contain structural awkwardness, such as "45 to 54 year old men were 43.1% and female were 53.3% which was the highest figeo of the bar chart." These persistent errors in grammar and punctuation can cause difficulty for the reader, justifying a Band 5.0.
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