Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

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AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response attempts to describe the data presented in the bar chart regarding Australian men and women doing regular physical activity in 2010. However, the student struggles significantly with data interpretation and accurate reporting. For instance, the data for several age groups is misread or inaccurately transcribed (such as stating the highest female group is 47.7% and listing incorrect percentages for men). Furthermore, there is no clear overall overview provided, and the structure of the response fails to summarize the main trends or make coherent comparisons. Because the information is largely confused, inaccurate, and lacks logical development, the response meets the criteria for Band 4.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The text lacks logical organisation and progression. There is no clear paragraphing, and the response is presented as a series of dense, disconnected blocks of text. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, with repetitive phrases such as 'in thess bar chart', 'in thess grup', and 'on the time'. The referencing between sentences and ideas is faulty, making it extremely difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information. The lack of structured cohesion and logical sequencing places this response at Band 4.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic, highly repetitive, and severely impacted by non-standard spelling and word choices (e.g., 'agr groups', 'countery', 'campiragen', 'femeal', 'mindem', 'prestenge'). The student attempts to use some topic-related terms like 'percentage', 'age group', and 'physical activity', but the pervasive spelling errors and inaccurate word choices severely strain the reader and impede clear communication. This reflects the descriptors for a Band 4.0 in Lexical Resource.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. There is a very limited range of sentence structures, and attempts at complex or compound sentences result in fragmented, ungrammatical strings (e.g., 'And the fast female age grup in the all of in six age grup in the austrailien countery in thess ant the higesst six age grup...'). Errors in word form, tense, and sentence boundaries are frequent and constantly distort meaning. Punctuation is also poorly managed. This corresponds to a Band 4.0 for Grammatical Range and Accuracy.

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