Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-09-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart compares the percentage of Australian men and women in various age groups doing regural physical activity in 2010.

Overall, the percentage of men doing regural physical activity was the highest among 15-24 years, while 25 to over 65 age groups of women was more intrested in physical activity.

Looking at the figure, age group of 15 to 24- 52.8% of male are intrested in doing physical activity compare to 47.7% female participant. Followed by 25 to 34 groups, men accounted for 42.2%, while women made up 48.9%. Groups of 35-44, male represented 39.5% compare to female with 52.5%.

Turning to 45-54 age group, women contributed the highest proportion by 53.3% which is 10.2% higher then male participants. Older adult (55-64), participating in regular activity by male was 45.1%, while female recorded exactly 53%. Lastly, people of the age of 65 and over of male and female showed similar interest in doing regular physical activity.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The student successfully covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features of the chart and making appropriate comparisons between age groups and genders. The overview is partially stated, noting that men were highest in the 15-24 group while women showed higher participation across several older brackets, though the phrasing is slightly clunky. Specific data points are accurately reported, such as mentioning 52.8% for males and 47.7% for females in the youngest bracket, and correctly identifying 53.3% as the peak for women in the 45-54 age group. However, some minor inaccuracies occur in the phrasing of comparisons and data reporting, placing it at a Band 6.5 level.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response is organized logically into an introduction, an overview paragraph, and body paragraphs detailing the specific age brackets. Cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'Looking at the figure', 'Followed by', and 'Turning to' are used to guide the reader through the data, although some transitions feel slightly mechanical. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate different sections of the chart. Referencing is mostly clear, though occasional awkward phrasing affects the smooth progression of ideas. This performance aligns well with the Band 6 descriptor.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully using terms like 'percentage', 'proportion', 'participants', and 'age group'. However, there are noticeable spelling errors ('regural' instead of regular, 'intrested' instead of interested) and word choice inaccuracies (e.g., 'Older adult (55-64), participating in regular activity by male...'). Less common vocabulary is attempted with mixed success. Because spelling and word-form errors do not impede overall communication, the vocabulary warrants a Band 6 score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The writer uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, incorporating comparative structures such as 'while women made up 48.9%' and 'which is 10.2% higher then male participants'. However, there are several grammatical errors and awkward prepositional uses, such as 'among 15-24 years', 'age group of 15 to 24- 52.8% of male are intrested', and 'higher then' (instead of 'than'). Punctuation is also occasionally inconsistent with hyphens and dashes. Since these errors rarely impede communication but persist throughout, a Band 6 is appropriate.

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