Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The provided bar chart demonstrates the proportion of Australian men and women with different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that female was more active doing regular activities rather than men at all ages. In contrast, the age group of 65 and above when both the genders were participated in the same level.
In 2010, the age group of 15 to 24 when men accounted for the highest proportion for doing regualr activity as compared to women, which had 52.8% and 47.7% respectively. However, in the age group of 45 to 54, female a recorded for the maximum percentage of doing regular exercise, at reaching 53.3% and 43.1 for male.
Regarding the age group of 65 and over when both women and men were doing regular physical activities remained same percentage-wise, at around 47%. During the adult age period, female surppessed to male for doing regular exercise, which at approximately 52% and 48% in the age group of 35 to 44 and 25 to 34, respectively. For male who did regular activity, which at nearby 40% for both the age groups.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response addresses the task by selecting key data points from the chart, such as the peak activity levels for men and women across various age categories. However, the overview contains notable factual inaccuracies, specifically claiming that females were more active than men at all ages, which is contradicted by the data for the 15 to 24 age group where males recorded a higher percentage. Furthermore, the statement that both genders participated at the same level in the 65 and over group is inaccurate, as the figures are 46.7% for males and 47.1% for females. While the main features are partially presented, the presence of these inaccurate generalizations prevents the response from achieving a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response demonstrates a basic organizational structure with paragraphs dedicated to an overview and specific body details. However, the progression is frequently hindered by awkward phrasing and repetitive structural patterns, such as the overuse of the phrase 'when both...' or 'when men accounted for...'. Cohesive devices are used mechanically and sometimes inaccurately, leading to a lack of smooth transitions between sentences. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, making it difficult to follow the logical relationship between the data points presented.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate to convey basic information about the chart, utilizing terms such as 'proportion', 'percentage', and 'age group'. However, there are notable word choice and collocation errors throughout the text, such as 'female was more active' instead of 'females were more active', 'participated' used intransitively incorrectly, and 'surppessed' (suppressed/surpassed). Additionally, spelling errors like 'regualr' appear in the text. While meaning is generally communicated, the persistent lexical inaccuracies restrict the score to this band level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response relies on a limited range of sentence structures, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty. There are persistent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'female a recorded', 'female surppessed to male'), incorrect prepositions, and awkward clause structures like 'the age group of 15 to 24 when men accounted for...'. These frequent errors require the reader to occasionally decode the intended meaning, which is characteristic of this grammar band.
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