Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
THE histogram chat dipict the information regarding man and women doing regular physical activity in australia in 2010.
Overview, the bar chart show the information higher ratio of men and women ages groups doing regular physical activity , in their men are decrese in physical activitys other wise women are increase in physical activity.
to beggin with, first age group men increase in physical activitys 52.8 procotional while, women are decrese in phycical activity, next age group 25 to 34 men are decrese in these activity rather , then women are increse 48.9,
following this , next age group last secon
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word length requirement of 150 words, stopping abruptly at only 101 words. Furthermore, the content only partially addresses the prompt. While the student attempts to introduce the chart and make some general observations about men and women doing regular physical activity in Australia in 2010, the summary is severely incomplete. The description breaks off mid-sentence in the second body section ('following this , next age group last secon'), meaning that key features and comparisons across the remaining age groups are entirely missing. The overall overview provided is confusing and lacks clarity, failing to accurately capture the main trends shown in the visual data. To achieve a higher score, the writer must ensure the full length requirement is met, complete the overview, and systematically report and compare the data across all age categories.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The response shows minimal organisation and lacks a clear overall progression. Although the writer attempts to use transition markers such as 'Overview,' and 'to beggin with,', these cohesive devices are used inaccurately and fail to logically link the ideas. Paragraphing is extremely fragmented and unconventional, with the text breaking down into isolated, incomplete sentences and fragments. Referencing is unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow which demographic or data point is being discussed. Because the response trails off abruptly at the end, there is no logical conclusion or completed body paragraphs. To improve, the writer needs to group related information into distinct, well-structured paragraphs and use cohesive devices accurately to guide the reader smoothly through the comparison of trends.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with noticeable errors in word choice, word form, and spelling that occasionally impede communication. For example, the student writes 'histogram chat' instead of 'bar chart', 'dipict' instead of 'depict', and 'man' instead of 'men'. There are also awkward lexical choices such as 'procotional' and 'phycical'. The range of vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate for the task, with frequent spelling mistakes ('beggin', 'decrese', 'increse'). To reach a higher band, the student must expand their lexical repertoire to include more precise vocabulary related to data trends and statistical changes, while paying much closer attention to standard spelling and correct word forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of poorly constructed simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex structures. There are frequent errors in verb forms, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions, such as in the phrase 'in their men are decrese in physical activitys other wise women are increase'. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing capitalisation at the beginning of sentences, run-on structures, and erratic comma placement. Because the text cuts off mid-sentence, complex grammatical patterns cannot be fully evaluated or sustained. To improve, the writer needs to focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring subjects and verbs agree, using correct verb tenses for data description, and avoiding sentence fragments.
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