Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar graph depicts the information regarding the percentage of australian male and female in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Overall, men were more active than women in the youngest age of groups, while the women are all age of group inclined physical activity in australian than boys and the last age groups most each male and female in physical activity.
Turning to the details, in the age groups 15 to 24, percentage of australian men doing regular physical activity was high around 55%, while the women proportion for 47.7%. Moreover, for 25 to 34 percentage of the group male was the low physical activity for 42.2% than female, next group was the females were high proportion of the physical activity in australia for 53.5% than males.
Moving towards rest of data, in the age of groups 45 to 54, proportion of australian men and women physical task, the high physical task was ladys around 55% than gents, while for the 55 to 64 men was the decrease percentage of physical activity than then male and the last group of the each activity male and female.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the prompt by discussing the bar chart on Australian physical activity in 2010, but the coverage is partial and confused. The overview paragraph is largely incomprehensible, failing to outline the main trends clearly. Furthermore, many of the specific data points cited in the body paragraphs are inaccurate or misread when compared to the visual data. For instance, the text claims that for the 15 to 24 age group, the male percentage was 'high around 55%', whereas the actual figure is 52.8%. Similarly, data for other age brackets are imprecise or garbled. To move to a higher band, the writer must ensure that the overview captures the most salient global trends accurately and that all data selected from the chart is reported with factual precision.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has some organisation with basic paragraphing, but there is no clear overall progression of ideas. The transitions between sentences and paragraphs feel disjointed, and the relationships between ideas are often obscure. Cohesive devices are used minimally or inappropriately, resulting in sentences that do not flow logically from one to the next. For example, phrases such as 'Moving towards rest of data' and 'last group of the each activity' create mechanical and confusing links rather than a smooth progression. To improve, the writer needs to structure the response around clear logical groupings, use standard cohesive markers accurately, and ensure that referencing is clear so the reader can easily follow the comparison between men and women.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and restricted to simple terms related to the graph. There are noticeable errors in word choice, word form, and collocation throughout the text, such as using 'australian' with lowercase letters, 'ladys', 'gents', and 'decrease percentage' instead of a decreased percentage. These lexical inaccuracies often cause difficulty and strain for the reader in trying to understand the intended meaning. To achieve a higher score, the writer must expand their vocabulary range by incorporating precise, task-appropriate vocabulary such as 'proportion', 'demographic', 'fluctuate', and 'marginal', while paying closer attention to correct word forms and spelling.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer demonstrates a very limited range of sentence structures, relying heavily on simple or poorly attempted complex sentences that frequently break down grammatically. There are frequent errors in verb forms, articles, prepositions, and subject-verb agreement, such as 'percentage of australian male and female' and 'women proportion for 47.7%'. Punctuation is also erratic, and many sentences lack essential grammatical elements, making them difficult to parse. To progress, the writer needs to focus on constructing grammatically sound simple and compound sentences, ensure proper subject-verb agreement, use articles consistently, and minimise basic grammatical errors that impede overall readability.
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