Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar graph illuestes the perportion of Australian men and women in various age catergory who did daily activity in 2010
Overiew, there are two major trends are observed that women age from age 44 to 64 had highest percentage in physical activities while the men from the age 25 to 35 had least accounted in physical activities.
According to the bar graph, age from 15 to 24 men had the highest rate 52.8% while the women had 47.7% on the other side age 25 to 34 women perportion rate increased to 48.9% while men decresed from 52.8% to 42.2% .The most noticeable age was 35 to 64 , women ratio dramtically increased from 52.5% to around about 53% while the men perportion slight rise from 39.5 to 45.1.
During the age 55 to 65 over men had 45.1% while women had 53%. However by the age of 65 and over women rato declined from 53 to 47.1 while men bit increased from 45.1 to 46.7.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response addresses the task partially by reporting some key features and comparisons from the bar chart, such as the peak figures for men and women in the 15-24 and 45-54 age groups respectively. However, the overview provided contains inaccurate generalisations that do not accurately reflect the overall data, specifically regarding the age brackets and trends. Furthermore, some data points are misreported or vaguely expressed, such as the description of the 35 to 64 age group. To reach a higher band, the overview needs to accurately summarise the main trends without containing factual inaccuracies, and all key features should be fully and correctly reported with precise comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response shows some organisation with an attempt to structure the essay into an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. However, there is no clear overall progression, and the sequencing of information is disjointed. Cohesive devices are used very mechanically or are inaccurate, as seen in the awkward transitions and the lack of proper linking phrases between sentences. Paragraphing is also poorly managed, particularly with the overview sentence being isolated and inadequately structured. To improve, the student should ensure a logical flow of ideas from one paragraph to the next, use a wider range of appropriate cohesive devices naturally, and structure paragraphs so that each has a clear, unified focus.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and barely adequate for the task. There are noticeable errors in word choice, spelling, and word form throughout the response, such as 'illuestes' for illustrates, 'perportion' for proportion, 'catergory' for category, and 'dramtically'. These errors, alongside imprecise terms like 'least accounted' and 'ratio', cause some difficulty for the reader and reflect a weak control of lexical features. To achieve a higher band, the student needs to expand their vocabulary range, use correct spelling consistently, and employ appropriate terminology related to data reporting, such as 'proportion', 'percentage', and 'fluctuate', with accurate collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response demonstrates a very limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple or faulty complex sentences. There are frequent grammatical errors, including missing prepositions, incorrect verb tenses, subject-verb agreement issues, and very poor punctuation with run-on sentences and missing full stops. For instance, phrases like 'women age from age 44 to 64 had highest percentage' lack necessary articles and accurate prepositional phrasing. To move up to the next band, the student must increase the variety of complex sentence forms and improve basic grammatical accuracy, focusing particularly on articles, prepositions within grammatical patterns, and sentence boundaries.
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