Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australian men and women doing regular phycial activities in 2010.
Overall, it is clear that women dominated in the most of the age groups compared to men only leading in a teenage group. In addition, both remained almost equal in 65 and over age group.
In teenager group men leads with 52.8 %, and women were at 47.7%. In the age group between (25 to 34) women rose to 48.9%, while, men group dropped to 42.2%. Men group continued to dropped at 39.5% in the adulthood (35 to 44) and women surge to 52.5%.
In age group of (45 to 54) men climed to 43.1% but women reached at the peaked with 53.3% in the same age group. Men show a slightly increase to 45.1% in (55 to 64) age group and women fell to 53% in that age group. After the 65 and over both came near to each other with men at 46.7% and women at 47.1.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5
The response successfully covers all key features of the prompt by presenting an overview and reporting specific data for men and women across the different age groups. It accurately notes that women recorded higher participation rates in most age groups, whereas men only led in the 15 to 24 category, with both genders converging in the oldest bracket. However, some parts of the response are more fully developed than others, and a few details lean towards a mechanical listing of figures rather than fully synthesized comparisons, which prevents the score from reaching a higher level. Overall, the selection and reporting of main features are adequately handled to meet the requirements of this band.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The response presents a coherent overall arrangement with a clear introduction, an overview paragraph, and subsequent body paragraphs following a logical age progression. Cohesive devices are used to link ideas, such as 'while', 'in addition', and 'after the 65 and over', but referencing and transitions can occasionally feel slightly mechanical or repetitive in structure. Paragraphing is used sufficiently to structure the information, though smoother integration of data points would enhance the overall flow and progression of the writing. These features place the cohesion securely within this band.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
An adequate range of vocabulary is employed for the task, successfully attempting less common items and descriptive verbs such as 'dominated', 'surge', 'climed', and 'fell'. However, there are noticeable spelling and word-choice errors that reflect limitations in precision, such as 'phycial' instead of 'physical', 'climed' instead of 'climbed', and awkward phrasing like 'in teenager group' and 'reached at the peaked'. While these errors do not impede communication, they demonstrate some inconsistency in word form and collocation, keeping the lexical score at this level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms to compare data across the chart. There are several grammatical errors present, particularly with missing or incorrect articles ('in the most of the age groups', 'in teenager group', 'in age group of'), prepositions, and subject-verb agreement or tense consistency ('men leads', 'continued to dropped', 'men show a slightly increase'). Despite these errors, the structures used are varied enough to convey the intended meaning without causing major difficulty for the reader, which aligns well with the descriptors for this band level.
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