Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given bar graph illlustrate the proportion of Australlian gents females in various age group who did regular physical work in 2010.

overall, percentage of female is more than male except age group of 15 to 24.

In age of 15 to 24 percentage of physical activity of male is 52.8%.In age of 25 to 34 percentage of physical activity of male is 42.2%.In age of 35 to 44 percentage of physical activity of male is 39.5%.In age of 45 to 54 percentage of physical activity of male is 43.1%.In age of 55 to 64 percentage of physical activity of male is 45.1%.In age of 65 and over percentage of physical activity of male is 46.7%.

In age of 15 to 24 percentage of physical activity of female is 47.7%.In age of 25 to 34 percentage of physical activity of female is 48.9%.In age of 35 to 44 percentage of physical activity of female is 52.5%.In age of 45 to 54 percentage of physical activity of female is 53.3%.In age of 55 to 64 percentage of physical activity of female is 53%.In age of 65 and over percentage of physical activity of female is 47.1%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the chart by identifying the overall trends and noting the age group where the pattern reverses. However, the data presentation relies heavily on listing individual figures mechanically for every single category without grouping them effectively or providing a more synthesized overview. While the overview correctly notes that females generally had a higher percentage of regular physical activity except in the 15 to 24 age group, the details provided afterwards lack sufficient selection and comparison, resulting in an under-developed approach to the task requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The text shows some organization, notably through the use of an introductory sentence and an overall summary statement. However, there is no clear progression because the body of the response consists of a repetitive list of individual data points formatted identically. Cohesive devices are largely absent beyond basic repetition of sentence structures, and paragraphing is inadequate as all the detailed statistics are lumped into two massive blocks of text rather than being broken down into logical subgroups.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, with noticeable errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'illlustrate' instead of illustrate, 'Australlian' instead of Australian, and 'gents females' instead of men and women. The use of 'physical work' instead of physical activity is an unnatural collocation. These errors reflect a restricted range of vocabulary that is only minimally adequate for the task, causing some difficulty for the reader and preventing access to higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The writing displays a very limited range of structures, relying entirely on repetitive simple sentences with identical phrasing ('In age of... percentage of physical activity of... is...'). There is a lack of complex sentence forms, alongside frequent missing or incorrect articles, such as writing 'overall, percentage of female is more than male except age group of 15 to 24.' These frequent errors in basic grammar, prepositions, and article usage cause difficulty and strain comprehension for the reader.

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