Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian men and women doing regular physical activity in 2010.

Overall, it is clear that women recorded the highest level of physical activity over the period, while the younger male group was dominant.

Female age groups 15 to 24 and 25 to 34 participation remained below 50% respectively 47.7% and 48.9% compared with men physical acitvity proportion stood at 52.8% and 42.2%. Furthermore, Female remained dominant in regular physical activity, whose percentage increase in older age groups 52.5%,53.3% and 53% for age groups 35 to 44, 45 to 54 and 55 to 64 respectively.

In contrast, the proportion for older male age groups remained under below 50%, which was relative low participation rate comapred with women 39.15%, 43.1% and 45.1%. Meanwhile, both male and female age groups 65 and over have relatively same figure for regular physical activity stood at 46.7 for male and 47.1 for women slightly higher tha male.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the main features of the chart only partially. While the overview attempts to highlight general trends, it is somewhat confused and inaccurate, claiming that women recorded the highest level of physical activity overall while simultaneously stating that the younger male group was dominant. In the body paragraphs, some data points are misreported or inaccurately transcribed from the visual data, such as the male figure for the 35 to 44 age group written as 39.15% instead of 39.5%. There is an attempt to compare men and women across different age brackets, but the selection of data is underdeveloped and lacks a fully clear comparative overview throughout the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The essay displays some basic organization with an introduction, body paragraphs, and an overall statement, but there is no clear overall progression. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as the abrupt transition 'respectively 47.7% and 48.9%' and repetitive linking phrases like 'Furthermore' and 'In contrast'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal logical flow within paragraphs is mechanical and sometimes difficult to follow. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, making it hard to track whether certain percentages belong to male or female categories without constantly re-reading the numbers.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is limited but minimally adequate to describe the chart data, featuring terms like 'proportion', 'age groups', and 'regular physical activity'. However, there are noticeable lexical errors, such as spelling mistakes ('acitvity', 'comapred') and awkward word choices ('relative low participation rate', 'relatively same figure'). Less common vocabulary is attempted with limited success, and these inaccuracies occasionally cause some difficulty or hesitation for the reader in grasping the exact quantitative comparisons.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response demonstrates a limited range of sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences are frequently faulty. There are frequent grammatical errors in verb forms, prepositions, and comparative structures, such as 'men physical acitvity proportion stood at', 'whose percentage increase in older age groups', and 'under below 50%'. Punctuation errors are also present, including missing hyphens in compound age descriptors and comma splices. These recurring errors cause noticeable difficulty for the reader and detract from the overall clarity of the writing.

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