Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar graph comapres the number of males and females who performed different physical activities of dofferent age groups in 2010.
Overall,the females belonged to age group 45 to 54 perfromed the activites the most and number of males belonged to 15 to 24 did the exercise excessively as comapred to other age groups.
In males categeory,47.7% males of 15 to 24 age groups did the excessive excercsie and foloowed by the next age group that is 25 to 34 the percentage was 42.2%. For age group 35 to 44,however,percenatge slightly dropeed to 39.5% but it showed a considerable upward trend for the age group of 55 to 64 with 45.1%.Meanwhile, the perecntsge for the age group of 65 and over was 46.7%.
Moving towards females,the largest number women who did excercise daily was 52.8% who belonged to age group of 15 to 24.While the percentage for age group of 25 to 34 was 42.2%.The least peprcentage was for the age group of 35 to 44 with only 39.5%.However percenatge increaesd sharply fpr the other age groups it was 43.1% for 45 to 54 age group ,45.1% for 55 to 64 age group and 47.1% was fro 65 and over .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response addresses the task only minimally and fails to provide an accurate overview of the chart. The data is largely misreported and confused; for instance, the figures cited for various age groups and genders do not align correctly with the visual data. The overview attempts to highlight trends, but it is inaccurate and difficult to follow, stating incorrect high points and incorrectly attributing statistics between the male and female categories. While the writer attempts to select and report some features, the frequent inaccuracies in reading the data mean the response falls short of providing a clear or complete summary.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
There is some basic organization with separate paragraphs for the introduction, overall trend, and body details, but there is no clear overall progression. Cohesive devices are minimal, repetitive, or inaccurate, such as mechanical linking words like 'however' and 'meanwhile'. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, making it hard to follow which group is being discussed. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal logical flow of information within paragraphs is disrupted by confusing sentence structures and abrupt transitions between data points.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, with frequent spelling and word-choice errors that impede communication. Examples include 'comapres', 'activites', 'categeory', 'excercsie', 'foloowed', and 'perecntsge'. Word forms are often misused, such as 'perfromed' and 'increaesd'. The range of vocabulary is barely adequate to describe the chart, and the numerous lexical errors strain the reader's understanding and prevent the response from achieving a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response displays a very limited range of structures, with frequent grammatical errors that often cause difficulty for the reader. There are persistent errors in article usage, subject-verb agreement, prepositions, and sentence boundary punctuation, such as missing spaces after commas and periods. Attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty, leading to tangled clauses like 'the largest number women who did excercise daily was 52.8% who belonged to age group of 15 to 24'. These structural issues significantly undermine the clarity of the writing.
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