Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australian men and women, that did physical activity in 2010 according to their age groups.

Overall, women were more active than men for most of the period. The rate of physical activities for male fell at middle age, before recovering while for the female, the rate of physical activities grew steadily and peaked at middle age.

The rate of physical activity among men was highest among the youngest group at 52.85% for 15-24 years. It then fell sharply to a low of 39.5% for 35 to 44 years old. After this, it then rose steadily reaching 46.7% among the age 65 and above. Men where ahead of women only in the youngest age group.

Contrary to physical activities in male, the physical activities in female grew steadily from 47.7% in 15-24 years, and peaked at 53.3% in 45-54 years. After that it fell to 53% in 55 to 64 years and then its lowest of 47.1% among the 65 and above years. Women were above men in every age group from 25-34 and at age 65 and above the rate of activity was almost equal.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The response successfully addresses all parts of the task by providing a clear overview and reporting the main features of the data. Key trends are highlighted, such as the peak in the youngest age group for men and the middle age groups for women, alongside relevant comparisons between genders. The data is accurately cited, matching the source chart well, such as the 52.8% figure for young males and the 53.3% peak for middle-aged females. However, ideas tend to over-generalise slightly in the second paragraph without fully exploring every nuance of the fluctuations, which keeps the response at this solid level rather than allowing it to reach higher development tiers.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

There is a clear logical organization and progression throughout the response. The essay begins with a suitable introductory statement, follows with a concise and effective overview paragraph, and then breaks down the body details logically by gender across age groups. Cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'It then fell sharply', 'After this', and 'Contrary to' are used with good effect to guide the reader through the comparisons, although there is a slight mechanical feel to how some transitions are introduced. Paragraphing is managed appropriately, grouping related ideas together into distinct, readable blocks.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully attempting less common items and descriptive phrases such as 'rose steadily', 'fell sharply', and 'peaked at middle age'. However, there are some minor word choice and collocation inaccuracies, such as writing 'the physical activities in female' instead of 'among females' or 'for women', and spelling slips like 'where' instead of 'were'. These errors do not impede communication, but they reflect a vocabulary resource that has occasional awkward moments, preventing a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The writing demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing relative clauses and varied time reference structures effectively. There are some minor errors in grammar and punctuation, such as missing articles ('the youngest group'), awkward prepositional use, and unnecessary commas splitting subjects and verbs ('Before recovering while for the female'). Nevertheless, these errors are relatively infrequent and rarely impede communication, allowing the reader to follow the descriptions of the chart with ease.

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