Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In 2010, the male group and female group were involved in regular exercise as we can see that in the age group of 15 to 24, the males were dominating with the ratio of 52.8% and females were 47.7%. In the next age group between 25 to 34 the females were dominating with the ratio of 48.9% snd males were 42.2%. Females also dominated in the age group between 35 to 44 with the ratio of 52.5% and leaving the men behind females also dominated in 45 to 54 age group and also in 55 to 64 age group but the age group between 65 and over males and females both have quit equal ratio with slight difference males were 46.7% and females were 47.1% involved in daily activities as we can see the females dominated in every age group in 2010 they were quit good at physical activities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s subject and report several accurate figures, including the male lead among 15–24-year-olds and the near-equal rates for people aged 65 and over. However, the response is only a minimal summary: it has no clear overview of the main pattern, and the claim that women “dominated in every age group” contradicts the male lead in the youngest group. The chart also shows women’s activity peaking around ages 35–64, while men’s rate falls and then rises; these key trends are not clearly summarised. The response is one word below the required minimum. To address the task more fully, give a concise overview and select the most important comparisons rather than listing age groups in sequence.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The age groups are presented in chart order, and phrases such as “In the next age group” and “also dominated” help signal comparisons. However, the response is one continuous paragraph and lacks a clear progression from an overview to supporting details. The repeated use of “dominating” and “also” makes the account feel like a list, while the long final sentence combines several comparisons and the conclusion without clear separation. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview, and one or two detail paragraphs. Use linking expressions selectively, and make sure each sentence develops one comparison or trend.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the basic subject and figures, with relevant terms such as “age group,” “ratio,” and “physical activities.” However, the range is limited and some choices are imprecise or repetitive. “Dominating” is repeated to describe higher percentages, but it sounds unnatural for chart reporting; “higher” or “had a higher participation rate” would be more suitable. “Involved in regular exercise” and “involved in daily activities” are also not precise descriptions of the chart’s measure, which is regular physical activity. There are spelling errors in “snd” and “quit,” and “ratio” is not the best term for percentages. Use accurate chart vocabulary and vary expressions for comparing rates.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use past-tense forms to describe the 2010 data, but the response relies heavily on joined clauses, so sentence control is uneven. For example, the sentence beginning “Females also dominated…” runs through several age groups and ends with a comparison without clear punctuation or structure. The opening, “the male group and female group were involved… as we can see that,” is also awkwardly constructed. There are some errors in articles and phrasing, such as “in 45 to 54 age group,” and the final sentence shifts into an unclear construction. Use shorter, complete sentences for individual comparisons, and check articles, clause boundaries, and punctuation when combining ideas.

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