Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrates the comparative analysis of regular physical activities of Australian men and women(in percentages) belonging to various age groups in the year 2010.

Overall, the highest and lowest proportion both were of males of different ages with many fluctuations suffered in an year, while females faced minor changes according to their ages.

In 2010, males aged 15-24 had the highest percentage of 52.8% in physical activities, a significant dismiss was noted in the age group of 25-34.Furthermore, 35 to 44 year old were also less active with 39.5%. In contrast, women of age 15 to 24 were less engaged in activities then men with 47.7% , but 25 to 34 and 35 to 44 aged were more active with 48.9% and 52.5%, respectively.

Meanwhile, 45 to 54 and 55 to 64 aged men had trivial changes in their movements(53.3% and 53%)and alike is applied to the same generation of women with minor and unnoticeable difference in activities(43.1% and 45.1%). Lastly, both genders of age 65 to over are nearly identical to each other in terms of their excertion with 46.7% and 47.1%, simultaneously.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the chart’s subject and include several relevant figures, including the male peak of 52.8% among 15–24-year-olds and the female peak of 53.3% among 45–54-year-olds. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: the highest and lowest proportions are not both male, and describing female changes as minor overlooks their rise from 47.7% to above 53% before falling. There is also a significant data mix-up in the paragraph on ages 45–64: the figures 53.3% and 53% belong to women, while 43.1% and 45.1% belong to men. These errors weaken the comparison and leave important features under-reported. State the overall pattern accurately, then check each figure against its age group and gender.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs that move through the age groups. Sequencing expressions such as “In contrast,” “Meanwhile,” and “Lastly” help signal comparisons, and the reader can generally follow the intended progression. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent overall arrangement and shows some flexibility in linking ideas. However, the comparisons within the 45–64 paragraph are difficult to follow because the male and female figures are assigned to the wrong groups, and phrases such as “alike is applied to the same generation” obscure the relationship. Organise the body by clearly pairing each age group’s male and female values, and use simpler, more precise references.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “engaged,” “active,” and “exertion,” and you attempt more formal phrasing. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural enough to make the data harder to interpret. “A significant dismiss” does not express a decline, while “fluctuations suffered in an year” is an awkward description of changes across age groups. “Trivial changes in their movements” is also unsuitable for reporting percentages of people doing physical activity. Spelling errors such as “excertion” further reduce precision. Prefer standard chart language and use it consistently—for example, “percentage,” “rose,” “fell,” and “remained relatively stable.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, using structures such as “while females…” and “but 25 to 34…,” so there is some variety. However, errors in sentence construction and agreement are frequent enough to make several passages awkward or unclear. For example, “the highest and lowest proportion both were” has an unnatural word order, and “35 to 44 year old were also less active” has faulty number agreement. The sentence beginning “Meanwhile” also has unclear grammatical relationships between the age groups and figures. Punctuation and spacing are inconsistent, including missing spaces after full stops and before percentages. Build shorter, controlled comparison sentences first, then check agreement, articles, and punctuation.

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