Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The static bar graph illustrates the proportion of australian males and females who had done physical fitness activities on daily basis in different age groups.

The cursory glance of the data reveals that there are certain categories that exceed others. The category that attained at highest percentage of females was age between 45 to 54 at 53.3%. Whereas, males were highest in the age of 15 to 24 at 52.8%. Comparing it with category that follows next that was age 55 to 64 was slightly lower than peak and about males were recorded at 45.1%.

A more detailed analysis reflects various othwer highlights in the chart.

To a surprise two categories showcase strong similarity in age 65 and over between men and women recorded around 47%. Other categories that are worth mentioning where 35 to 44, 25 to 34 both males and females was observed as 39.5% men 52.5% women and 48.9%, 42.2% respectively.

Overall, the data can be interpreted in many ways but the striking comparison can be drawn in age 35 to 44 where females were highest and males were lowest.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant comparisons, including the male peak of 52.8% among 15–24-year-olds and the female peak of 53.3% among 45–54-year-olds. However, the response only partially summarises the chart: it does not clearly describe the overall pattern that women were more active than men in every age group except 15–24, or that male activity fell and then rose with age. Some details are also misreported. You say females were highest at 45–54, which is correct, but later claim they were highest at 35–44; 52.5% is below the 53.3% peak. The statement that men were lowest at 35–44 is accurate. A clear overview of the main trends, supported by carefully checked comparisons, would make the report more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has separate paragraphs and attempts to move from an introduction to comparisons and then a concluding overview. This gives it some organisation, but the progression is not consistently clear. Phrases such as “The cursory glance” and “A more detailed analysis” announce sections without establishing a logical sequence of the chart’s main features. The final paragraph repeats a comparison already mentioned and introduces a claim that conflicts with the earlier account of the female peak. Linking expressions such as “whereas” and “overall” are used, but some connections are awkward or unclear, particularly “Comparing it with category that follows next.” Organise the report around an accurate overview, followed by grouped comparisons, and use references that make each comparison explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonably varied set of terms for describing data, including “proportion,” “percentage,” “peak,” and “comparison,” and the meaning is generally understandable. There are also noticeable problems with word choice, collocation, spelling, and form. “Physical fitness activities on daily basis” is not a natural description of the chart’s “regular physical activity,” while “attained at highest percentage” and “strong similarity” are awkward. “Cursory glance” is an unsuitable phrase for a formal summary, and “othwer” is misspelled. Aim for precise, conventional chart language rather than ornate expressions: for example, say that a figure “was highest” or “stood at” a particular percentage. This would improve clarity and control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple statements and longer comparative sentences, and several figures are presented in understandable clauses. However, sentence structures are often faulty, especially when several comparisons are combined. For example, “Comparing it with category that follows next that was age 55 to 64 was slightly lower than peak” lacks a clear grammatical structure, and “males and females was observed” has a subject–verb agreement error. Articles and prepositions are also frequently missing or misplaced, as in “on daily basis” and “in age 35 to 44.” Punctuation around the sentence beginning “Whereas” is also awkward. Use shorter, complete comparison sentences and check agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries; this will make your meaning more consistently clear.

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