Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The chart shows that men and women aged 15 to 24 ,men were more prone to physical activity than women.52.8% men whereas 47.7% women.But ageing from 25 to 35 women is seen to be more interested in physical activity than men.48.9% women and only 42.2% men.When they aged alittle bit more like 35 to 44 , again there is significant increase in women group and it crossed 50% precisely 52.5%.In contrast mens parcentage dropped significantly.IT went down to 39.5%.After that womens activity parcentage remained steady by staying over 50% for the next two age group 45 to 54 and 55 to 64 ,both showed 53.3% and 535 subsequently.On the other hand mens next two age group 45 to 54 and 55 to 64 showed a little increase than previous group. 43.1% for 44 to 54 age group and 45.1% for 55 to 64 age group.Finally for the last age group 65 and over ,both men and women group showed similar parcentage with women having a little edge over men.Men 46.7% and women 47.1%.

So in conclusion the chart shows women are predominant almost in every age group except the when they are young agi berween 15 to 24 and for men it is just the opposite.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You report several accurate figures and relevant comparisons, including the male lead among 15–24-year-olds (52.8% versus 47.7%) and the near-equal rates among people aged 65 and over. You also identify that women’s rates are higher across most other age groups. However, the response is largely a sequence of age-by-age details rather than a clear overview of the main patterns. The conclusion that women are predominant “almost in every age group” is broadly supported, but the contrasting trends could be summarised more precisely: men’s rate falls to a low at 35–44 before rising, while women’s rate peaks around middle age and then declines. Some figures are unclear or inaccurate, such as “535” for women aged 55–64. Prioritise these overall features and check each value carefully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic structure, with an opening, a chronological account of the age groups, and a concluding statement. Phrases such as “In contrast,” “After that,” and “Finally” help signal comparisons and sequence. However, the main body reads as a long chain of details, and the progression is sometimes difficult to follow because comparisons between the sexes are not consistently grouped. The conclusion repeats the general comparison rather than adding a concise overview of the trends. Several transitions are awkward or unclear, for example “But ageing from 25 to 35,” and punctuation spacing makes boundaries between ideas hard to see. Organise the body into clearer groups—such as younger adults and older age groups—and use linking phrases selectively to show the key contrasts.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing the chart, including “percentage,” “significant increase,” “remained steady,” and “a little edge.” These choices show an attempt to vary language beyond simply listing figures. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “more prone to physical activity,” “interested in physical activity,” and “predominant.” Repeated use of “group” and “showed” also makes the account less precise. Spelling errors, including “parcentage” and “agi,” are noticeable and reduce the clarity and control expected at this level. Aim for standard chart language such as “participation rate,” “was higher than,” and “rose/fell,” and proofread carefully for spelling and word form.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas using contrast and time clauses, and some basic comparisons are understandable. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and complex attempts are often faulty. For example, “The chart shows that men and women aged 15 to 24, men were more prone…” has an incomplete and confusing structure, while “When they aged a little bit more” does not form a clear clause. Missing or misplaced punctuation creates run-on sentences, and agreement and article use are inconsistent, as in “both men and women group showed.” These errors sometimes make relationships between figures difficult to interpret. Build shorter, complete sentences first, then add controlled clauses such as “whereas” or “while”; check sentence boundaries, plural forms, and subject–verb agreement.

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