Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illustrate the ratio of Australia boys and girls in different age group who did regular physical activity in 2010.

overall, it can be seen that girls had higest participated in regular physical activities where as boys inly aged 15 to 24 only involved i. regular activities.

Approximately 52.8% men involved in regular activity where compared to 47.7% women group aged 15-24 . However aged group25 - 34 , men had only 42.2 % involved in regular activities where girls about 48.9% . Aged beteeen 65 over had been fluctuated in both groups .

In contrast , aged 34 to 44 52.8 % girls participated in regular activities follwed by 39.5% boys .next , people aged between 55- 64 had 53%girls paricipated where boys had

45.1% only.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the broad comparison that women were more active in most age groups, and you report several relevant figures, including 52.8% of men and 47.7% of women aged 15–24. However, the overview is unclear and inaccurate: men were not active only in that youngest group, and women’s highest rate was among 45–54-year-olds, not a general peak across all groups. Some figures are missing or misreported; for ages 35–44, women’s figure is 52.5%, not 52.8%, and the 45–54 group is not covered. The statement that the oldest group “had been fluctuated” does not describe the chart clearly. The response is also 21 words below the required minimum. Include a precise overview and cover the main age-group patterns.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening, an overview, and paragraphs comparing age groups. Connectors such as “However” and “In contrast” show an effort to signal comparisons. Nevertheless, the progression is difficult to follow because the age groups are presented in a scattered order, and the overview does not clearly guide the reader through the data. Some linking phrases are inaccurate or awkward, such as “where compared to” and “followed by,” while the final sentence is left incomplete after “boys had.” Use a consistent sequence, such as moving from the youngest to the oldest group, and give each paragraph a clear purpose. Complete sentences and clearer references would make the comparisons easier to track.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “regular physical activity,” “participated,” and “age group,” so the reader can recognise the topic and intended comparisons. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear. “Ratio” is not the right term for percentages, and “girls” and “boys” are unsuitable for describing adult age groups; use “women” and “men.” Phrases such as “highest participated” and “had been fluctuated” are not natural English. Spelling errors, including “beteeen,” “follwed,” and “paricipated,” also reduce clarity. Build a small set of accurate chart-description phrases and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and more complex comparisons, for example, “However aged group 25–34, men had only 42.2% … whereas girls about 48.9%.” This shows an effort to compare information within a sentence. However, the range remains limited, and frequent errors in sentence construction and verb forms make several statements difficult to read. The opening, “The bar chart illustrate,” has subject–verb disagreement, while “men involved” and “girls participated” often lack a correctly formed verb phrase. Articles and prepositions are also missing or misplaced, and punctuation and spacing are inconsistent. Practise complete subject–verb sentences, then combine them with accurate “whereas” or “while” clauses; this will improve both control and variety.

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