Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar charts provides a comparitive overview of men and women regularly doing physical activityin different age groups in Australia in the year 2010, with the figures expressed in percentage.

Overall, the females in neraly 50 recorded the highest figure, whereas men in their middle age registered the lowest. Another noteworthy feature is considerable disparity between these two categories, while the young adults and teeneagers occupied the intermediate positions.

Looking first at male and female in the age group of 45 to 54 and 55 to 64, the people in mid fifties to nearly retirement stood at 53.3 percent of females and 45.1 percent male, considerably exceeding the corresponding figure for people in ages between 45 to 54, at nearly fifty percent. Similarly, the children recorded 52.8 and 47.7 in wherw thw male dominated the female.

As for the remaining categories, the individuals in the age group of 25 to 34 registered 42.2 and 48.9 percent, followed by 65 and over at 46.7% male and 47.1% female. Taken as whole, the figures reveal substantial variation across the categories

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s subject and include several relevant figures, such as 52.8% for young men and 47.7% for young women, and the female peak of 53.3% among 45–54-year-olds. However, the overview is unclear and contains inaccurate claims: women did not reach their highest figure “in nearly 50” (their peak was 45–54), and the lowest male rate was among 35–44-year-olds, not broadly “middle age” without clarification. Some comparisons are also misreported: the 45–54 figures are not given accurately, and the 55–64 figures are confused with them. To strengthen the response, state the main trends accurately, then compare the sexes across the age groups using the correct values.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs covering selected age groups. Phrases such as “Looking first” and “As for the remaining categories” help signal the shift between details. However, the progression is weakened by grouping ages inconsistently and by unclear references, particularly “the people in mid fifties to nearly retirement” and “the corresponding figure.” The overview also introduces a comparison without explaining it clearly. Organise the details in a consistent sequence—for example, youngest to oldest—and compare male and female rates within each age group. This would make the information easier to follow and reduce the need for the reader to infer what each figure refers to.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “registered,” “considerably exceeding,” “corresponding figure,” and “substantial variation.” However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing this chart. “Children” is unsuitable for the 15–24 age group, while “females in nearly 50” does not clearly express a percentage or age group. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “comparitive,” “neraly,” and “teeneagers,” and the phrase “physical activityin” lacks a space. Prefer precise, straightforward language over elaborate wording: describe participants as men and women, refer to age groups directly, and use “percentage” or “rate” consistently.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of sentence forms, including longer comparisons and clauses introduced by “whereas” and “while.” Some sentences communicate the intended comparison, but grammatical control is uneven. For example, “The bar charts provides” has a subject–verb agreement error, and “the figures expressed in percentage” is missing a verb and an article. In “the people in mid fifties … stood at 53.3 percent of females,” the sentence structure makes the relationship between the age group and the figures difficult to understand. The final sentence, “Taken as whole,” also needs an article. Build accuracy by using clear subject–verb patterns, checking articles and agreement, and separating complex comparisons into shorter sentences when needed.

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