Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

In Australia, age between 15 to 24, the physical activity of men are 52.8 and women are 47.7, male physical activity is slightly highier as compared to women. Age between 25 to 34, women physical activity is highier than men, which is 48.9 and 42.2. Moreover, Age group of 35 to 44 and 45 to 54 women percentage is more high as compared to men. In these age groups women do more physical activities than any other age group.

Furthermore, poeple between 55 to 64, also has more women physical activities. The last age group which is 65 and over, in this age group both men and women physical activities prcentage is nearly equal. From this bar chart, in 2010, women has done more physical activities. The peak physical activity percentage is 53.3 from the women side in 2010 from the age group of 45 to 54.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the chart’s subject and report several relevant figures, including the male lead among 15–24-year-olds (52.8% versus 47.7%) and the female peak of 53.3% among 45–54-year-olds. You also note that the sexes are nearly level in the oldest group. However, the response only partly summarises the main features: it lacks a clear overview of the contrasting trends, and the claim that women were more active overall is too broad without qualification, since men led in the youngest group. The statement that women in the 35–44 and 45–54 groups were more active than in any other age group is also imprecise; 45–54 was the female peak, but 35–44 was not. Compare the overall patterns more accurately and selectively, rather than listing age groups in sequence.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response follows the age groups in chart order, so the reader can generally connect the figures to the relevant categories. Paragraphing also separates the opening from the details. However, there is no distinct overview, and the progression is mostly a sequence of individual observations rather than a clear summary of the main patterns. Linking words such as “Moreover” and “Furthermore” are used, but they do not always show a meaningful relationship between the points. For example, the final paragraph moves from the 55–64 group to the oldest group and then to a broad conclusion without clearly synthesising the comparisons. Organise the response around an overview followed by grouped comparisons, such as the youngest group, middle-aged groups, and oldest group.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age group,” and “peak,” and the reader can usually understand the comparisons you intend. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repeated or awkwardly formed, such as “physical activity is highier” and “women physical activities.” Spelling errors, including “poeple,” “prcentage,” and “highier,” are noticeable and reduce accuracy. Some expressions are also imprecise for describing data: “more high” and “from the women side” are not natural collocations. Aim for concise, standard reporting language and vary the verbs used to describe figures and trends. For instance, “women recorded a higher proportion” is clearer than “women physical activity is highier.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some longer sentences and comparisons, but sentence structures are limited and errors occur frequently. Agreement is a recurring problem: “the physical activity of men are” should use a singular verb or be recast, and “women has done” should be “women did” or “women were.” The construction “In Australia, age between 15 to 24” is incomplete, while “both men and women physical activities prcentage is nearly equal” has unclear grammatical relationships. Comparisons also need more controlled forms, such as “higher than that of men.” Use complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement, tense, and comparative structures before submitting.

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