Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar graph illustrates the proportion of Australian male and female in six different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Overall, it is crystal clear that women was more engaged in daily physical activities rather than men in every age groups, expect in 15 to 24 . Women was more active in the physical activities from the age 45 to 54 and men was ahead from the women in young age.

At a fleeting glance, men had the highest proportion in age group 15 to 24 at 52.8%, compared to women at 47.7%. In the 25 to 34 category, men had dropped significantly at 42.2% but women had rose marginally at 48.9%. This gap widened further among aged 35 to 44, women had rise up to more than 52% and men had fallen to 39.5%.

Moreover, a similar pattern was observed in age groups 25 to 54 and 55 to 64. Male participation slightly increased to 43.1% and 45.1% respectively, which still were below than women 53.3% and 53%. In the older age women and men exercised similar at 47.1% and 46.7%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover the main comparisons and provide a clear overview: women were more active in all groups except ages 15–24, and the figures for the oldest group were close. Most reported values are accurate, including the male peak of 52.8% and the female high of 53.3%. The response also identifies the broad fall and subsequent rise in male participation. To make the overview more precise, avoid saying women were most active “from the age 45 to 54”: their highest rate was 53.3% at 45–54, but rates were similarly high at 35–44 and 55–64. The claim that men were ahead “in young age” should be limited to the 15–24 group. These small over-generalisations keep the summary from being fully precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to comparisons by age group. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Moreover,” and “In the older age” help signal the stages of the report. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. “Moreover, a similar pattern was observed in age groups 25 to 54 and 55 to 64” is confusing because the following figures describe separate groups, and the 25–34 group has already been discussed. The overview also repeats the comparison between men and women without clearly organising the key trends. Grouping the younger ages together, then the middle and older groups, and using clearer references would make the progression more controlled.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “category,” “participation,” and “widened,” and the meaning is generally clear. There are also attempts at less common expressions, but some are unnatural or imprecise for an academic chart report. “At a fleeting glance” is not an appropriate way to introduce data, while “crystal clear” is too conversational. Phrases such as “women had rose” and “men had dropped” also show inaccurate word forms or collocations. Prefer neutral reporting language and use verbs such as “rose,” “fell,” “increased,” and “declined” accurately. More precise wording would help distinguish a peak, a gradual change, and a close comparison.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons with “compared to” and clauses describing changes across age groups. The overall meaning is usually understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “women was” should be “women were,” and “women had rose” should be “women rose” or “had risen.” In “men had dropped significantly … but women had rose marginally,” the verb forms are not parallel. There are also problems with articles and comparison patterns, as in “below than women”; write “below the figure for women.” Review subject–verb agreement, past-tense forms, and comparative structures. Greater accuracy in these areas, alongside your attempts at varied sentences, would strengthen the report.

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