Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The bar chart illustrate the percentage of Australian men and women physical activity in different age groups in 2010.

Overall, women had higher percentage of regular physical activity than man in all age groups except the 15 to 24 groups. The figure for women generally increased with age, while the percentage of men fluctuated.

Looking at the younger age groups, men recorded higher participation than women among those aged 15-24, at 52.8% compared to 42.2%. However, this pattern was reversed in the 25-34 and 35-44 age groups. Women accounted for 48.9% and 52.5% respectively. while the corresponding figure for men 42.2% and 39.5%

In the older age groups, women continued to higher participation rates than men. Among those aged 45-54, the figure were 53.3% for women and 43.1% for men. Similarly, age 55-64 age group 53% of women did regular physical activity, compare with 45.1% of men. However, in age 65 and over groups, the figure was almost same, at 47.1% for women and 46.7% for men respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You provide a clear overview of the main pattern: women were more active in every age group except 15–24, and male participation fluctuated. Most figures are reported accurately, and the comparisons across younger and older groups are relevant. However, one important figure is misreported: for men aged 15–24, the comparison should be 52.8% versus 47.7%, not 42.2%. The overview could also be more precise: women’s rate rises to a peak among 45–54-year-olds before edging down, rather than simply increasing with age. These inaccuracies and the uneven development of the overview and details limit how fully the chart is summarised.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response has a clear overall progression, moving from an introduction and overview to younger and then older age groups. Paragraphing supports this structure, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “However,” and “Similarly” help readers follow the comparisons. The organisation is generally logical, though some transitions and sentence boundaries are not fully controlled. For example, “respectively. while” breaks the sentence awkwardly, and the comparison of the 25–34 and 35–44 groups is difficult to follow because the figures are presented in a fragmented sentence. Keep each comparison in a complete sentence and use linking words to show the relationship between the figures, rather than relying on punctuation to connect them.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use an adequate range of task-relevant vocabulary, including “participation,” “fluctuated,” “higher percentage,” and “corresponding figure.” These choices make the chart’s trends and comparisons understandable, and there is some variation in how you describe the data. However, several word combinations are unnatural or imprecise, such as “women continued to higher participation rates” and “the figure was almost same.” “Physical activity” also needs to be expressed more naturally when describing the participants. Greater control of collocations and more precise phrasing would make the report sound more fluent. The vocabulary is sufficient for the task, but occasional awkward choices prevent consistently precise expression.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including the contrast in “while the percentage of men fluctuated” and comparisons using “compared to.” Meaning is usually clear, but some errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence construction remain. For example, “The bar chart illustrate” needs subject–verb agreement, while “the figure for men 42.2% and 39.5%” is missing a verb. Other examples include “the figure were” and “women continued to higher participation rates.” Punctuation also causes a fragment after “respectively.” Aim to check each sentence for a clear subject and finite verb, and review singular/plural agreement and articles before finalising.

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