Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australian men and women who did physical activities in distinct age groups in 2010.

Overall, the female over 25 did exercises regularly more than compared to the male. But over 15 and under 25 the boys did physical activities more than girls.

The age group between 15 to 24 the boys did physical works 52.8% was bigger than girls 47.7%, while age groups between 25 to 34, these done 42.2% which less than the female 48.9%. The age group between 35 to 44, the women were substantial in numbers 52.5% compared to the men which was just 39.5%.

The age group between 45 to 54 was the highest group of the women in numbers was 53.3%, the male group was 43.1%. The age group between 55 to 64, the female was still the greater percentage 53% than the male which was 45.1%. Nevertheless, over 65 age male and female almost equals in numbers doing physical activities regularly 47.1% and 46.7% respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover the chart’s main comparisons and give a clear overview: women recorded higher activity in every age group except 15–24, while men led in that youngest group. The figures you report are accurate, including the near-equal results among people aged 65 and over. This strong coverage meets the task well and shows some of the precision expected at a higher level. However, the overview could identify the broader patterns more fully: male participation fell to its low point at ages 35–44 before rising, while female participation peaked around ages 45–64. Some comparisons are also presented one age group at a time rather than synthesised into these trends, so the key features are not yet fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to comparisons of the age groups. This makes the information generally easy to follow, and transitions such as “while” and “Nevertheless” help signal contrasts. However, the repeated opening “The age group between…” makes the body paragraphs feel list-like, and the overview’s “But” creates a slightly abrupt shift. Grouping the data into broader patterns—for example, the male decline and recovery, followed by women’s higher rates across the middle age groups—would create clearer progression. Some references are also awkward or unclear, such as “these done 42.2%,” which interrupts the flow. More varied linking and clearer references would make the organisation smoother.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age groups,” “regularly,” and “compared to,” so the topic remains clear. There is also an attempt at more descriptive language in “substantial in numbers.” However, several choices are unnatural or imprecise for a data report: “boys” and “girls” are less suitable than “men” and “women” for adult age groups, “physical works” does not convey the intended meaning, and “the highest group of the women in numbers” is awkward. Repetition of “age group” and “physical activities” also limits range. Aim for precise reporting expressions such as “the proportion of women,” “participation,” and “was higher than,” while keeping collocations natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple statements and longer comparisons, including clauses joined with “while” and “compared to.” The main comparisons are usually understandable, but some grammatical errors recur and occasionally make relationships unclear. For example, “The age group between 15 to 24 the boys did physical works 52.8% was bigger” lacks a clear sentence structure, while “the female over 25 did exercises regularly more than compared to the male” has faulty comparison construction. There are also issues with articles, agreement, and phrasing in “the female was still the greater percentage.” Practise building comparisons with a clear subject and verb, such as “Among 15–24-year-olds, the male figure was higher than the female figure.” This would improve accuracy while allowing more varied sentence forms.

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