Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar graph illustrates the proportion of different men and women age groups from Australia, who did daily excersises in the year 2010. Age group was divided into total six categories.

Overall, as we can see that male was featured in light brown shaded, while female were featured as black. The precentage of men and femal has kind similar diferences. By compare to male group female were seen more active in most of the categories.

The age group from 15 to 24, where male group has been recorded total of 52.8 percentage. Which was the highest number of male groups who did regular excersises in year 2010. On the other hand, female were recorded total 47.7 percentage. Moreover, the age group from 45 to 54 was the noticeable one because female age group had been reported the highest number of precentage among other groups which was 53.3 percent.

Also age group from 25 to 34 were recorded 42.2 and 48.9 respectively.

The age group from 25 to 44 were seen as long gap, where female group was reported 52.5 and male groups were at 39.5. Similarly, age group between 55 to 64 was reported 45.1 and 53 percentage. Age group from 65 and over as seen competetive. Whereas, that was recorded 46.7 and 47.1 respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You include relevant figures from all six age groups and identify important comparisons, such as men’s peak of 52.8% among 15–24-year-olds and women’s peak of 53.3% among 45–54-year-olds. However, the overview is unclear and does not accurately summarise the main pattern: women were more active in every age group except 15–24, rather than simply in “most” categories. Some details are also imprecise. For example, “25 to 44” combines two chart categories, and the 35–44 comparison is not clearly set out as 52.5% for women versus 39.5% for men. Give a concise, accurate overview first, then compare the figures systematically.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has separate paragraphs and generally moves from an introduction to an overview and then to age-group details, so there is some organisation. However, the progression within the detail paragraphs is difficult to follow: the discussion jumps from the youngest group to 45–54, back to 25–34, and then to other groups. Linking phrases such as “On the other hand,” “Moreover,” and “Similarly” are used, but they do not always make the relationship between the figures clear. The final paragraph also leaves the comparison for ages 65 and over incomplete. Group the data in a consistent order or by meaningful patterns, and use clear references such as “women’s figure” and “the corresponding male rate.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “proportion,” “age group,” “percentage,” and “recorded,” and the reader can generally understand that you are describing chart data. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, including “daily exercises” for regular physical activity and “long gap” for a difference between rates. Spelling errors such as “excersises,” “precentage,” “diferences,” and “competetive” are noticeable and reduce precision. Some phrases, such as “male was featured” and “female were recorded total,” are also unnatural for describing data. Use standard chart language consistently, for example “the proportion of men” and “the rate among women.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some longer structures, including clauses beginning “where” and “because,” but these are often incomplete or awkwardly formed. For example, “The age group from 15 to 24, where male group has been recorded…” is a sentence fragment, and “Also age group from 25 to 34 were recorded…” has an unclear subject and verb agreement. There are recurring problems with articles, plurals, and tense, as in “male was featured” and “female were featured.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation also make some comparisons harder to follow. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use straightforward past-tense forms such as “Men recorded 52.8%, while women recorded 47.7%.”

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