Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The graph illustrates percentage of Australian male and female in various age groups who did regular exercise in 2010.

Overall, it is clear that figures of both man and women are flucuating in the chart and as they got older women prefer to do more physical work than man.

In bar graph, the percentage of young male under age of 24 who did regular physical activities is 52.8% which exceed female percentage of 47.7%. However, the position are swapped incase of people between 25 and 34 year old as women percantage increased to 48.9%, whereas man percantage fall to 42.2. This trend continued even in people in age group of 35 to 44 as female percentage shown upward trend with 52.5%, and male percentage continued to decline with 39.55.

In older population, man percentage shows upward trend with increasing to 43.1% and female percenatge slightly rise to 53.3% at the age of 45 to 54 year old. The female percentage shows slight fall to 53% and male percantage continues to rise reaching 45.1% in age of 55 to 64. Similarly, female percantage falls to 47.1%, whereas male percantage increased to 46.7%. Despite of fall in women percantage in old age, as they still remain higher in percentage that men in regualr exercise.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover the main comparisons and provide a clear overview: men lead in the youngest group, while women have higher participation in every other age group. Most figures are reported accurately, including the male low of 39.5% at ages 35–44 and the female peak of 53.3% at 45–54. The response also identifies the broad rise and fall in the older groups. To make the overview more precise, avoid saying women’s activity rises as they get older: it increases to middle age and then declines. The final comparison is also slightly overstated, since the sexes are nearly level among those aged 65 and over (47.1% versus 46.7%). These details keep the summary from being fully precise, although the key features are covered.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a sensible overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs moving through the age groups in order. Linking words such as “However,” “whereas,” and “Similarly” help signal comparisons, and the reader can follow the data progression. Some connections are less clear or repetitive, however. For example, “This trend continued” is not quite accurate because male participation begins to rise after ages 35–44, and the final sentence repeats the point that women remain higher. The overview and body could also be more clearly separated in purpose: state the main patterns once, then use the body to support them with figures. This would make cohesion more flexible and less mechanical.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “percentage,” “upward trend,” “slight fall,” and “age group,” so the meaning is generally understandable. However, the range and control are limited by repeated use of “percentage” and “trend,” as well as awkward or inaccurate expressions such as “women prefer to do more physical work” and “the position are swapped.” Several spelling errors—“flucuating,” “percantage,” “percenatge,” and “regualr”—also make the writing less polished. Aim for precise chart language and vary how you describe changes, for example, “participation rate,” “rose,” or “declined.” More accurate collocations would help you report the data clearly without changing its meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including comparisons with “whereas” and clauses beginning “as” and “despite.” The main message is usually clear, but some grammatical errors recur. Examples include “percentage of Australian male and female,” “figures of both man and women are,” and “the position are swapped,” where articles, plurals, and subject–verb agreement are not controlled. The final sentence, “Despite of fall in women percentage…,” is also structurally incomplete and uses an incorrect clause pattern. There are some awkward sentence constructions that make relationships between ideas less clear. Review agreement, articles, and how to form contrast clauses; then check each sentence for a complete main clause.

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