Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given bar graph illustrates the percentage of regular physical activity done by Australian males and females of different age groups in 2010.

Overall, females in all age groups except 15 to 24 were more devoted, whereas men in the 15 to 24 age group were participating more as compared to the other age groups of men.

The foremost in the given data, men are leading in physical activity rather than women with 52.8% while women are at only 47.7% in 15 to 24 age circle. Pointing on the age group of 25 to 34, the data clearly showed that 48.9% women are more into physical fitness and men are only at 42.2%. Furthermore, The dramatical increase was shown in the age groups of 35 to 44 and 45 to 54, in which females are on the almost same level which is in between 52.5-53.3% however, males have very low activity from the both the groups, at 39.5 and 43.1, respectively. As we take glane on the age group of 55 to 64, this data also showed the huge difference in the physical activity done by females and males, this difference was of 8% in which women was having more percentage. Lastly, the group of 65 and over, were almost on the same level fro participating in physical acitivities.

To conclude, females were leading in paarticipatin in physical activities than the males.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the chart’s subject and give a relevant overview: women recorded higher activity in every age group except 15–24, while men’s highest figure was in that youngest group. You also report several key values accurately, including 52.8% versus 47.7% for the youngest group and the figures for ages 35–54. However, some comparisons are incomplete or imprecise. For example, you call the 55–64 gap “8%” rather than specifying the difference in percentage points, and “almost the same level” for those aged 65 and over would be clearer with the figures, 46.7% and 47.1%. The overview also misses the broader pattern: men’s rate falls then rises, while women’s rate rises to a middle-age peak before falling. Select and explain these main trends more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to age-group comparisons and a concluding statement. Sequencing phrases such as “Furthermore” and “Lastly” help the reader follow the age groups. However, progression is sometimes mechanical, and several transitions introduce awkward or unclear relationships. “The foremost in the given data” does not clearly signal the next comparison, while “As we take glane” interrupts the flow rather than linking ideas naturally. The final “To conclude” repeats the overview without adding a useful synthesis. Grouping the data into a paragraph about the youngest groups and one about the middle and oldest groups would make the comparisons easier to follow. Use linking expressions selectively and make each paragraph develop a clear point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of topic vocabulary, including “regular physical activity,” “age groups,” “percentage,” and “difference,” so the chart remains understandable. There are also attempts at more varied phrasing, such as “devoted” and “dramatical increase,” but these are not natural or precise in this context. Several spelling errors—“glane,” “acitivities,” and “paarticipatin”—and phrases such as “age circle” and “men are leading” reduce accuracy and polish. Prefer standard chart language and collocations, for example “participation rate,” “age group,” “women recorded a higher proportion,” and “the rate rose.” This would give you more precise vocabulary without relying on elaborate expressions that do not fit the data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including clauses beginning “whereas” and “in which,” and the main comparisons are generally understandable. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly with agreement and sentence construction. In “women was having more percentage,” the subject and verb do not agree, and “the group of 65 and over, were” incorrectly separates a singular subject from its verb. The sentence beginning “The foremost in the given data” is also incomplete or awkwardly constructed. Punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent, as in “Furthermore, The.” Aim for direct, controlled sentences such as “Women recorded 53% in the 55–64 group, compared with 45.1% of men.” Continue using complex structures, but check subject–verb agreement and ensure each sentence has a clear main clause.

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