Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

A survey was carried out to understand how physically active Australians are across different age groups and gender. Here is the data from the 2010 survey.

The most prominent trend in this chart is that more women between the ages 25 and 64 exercised regularly, than men. For adults aged 35 to 44, the gap between men and women is the most - 52.5% of all women, as compared to 39.5% of all men. Amongst all ages in the sample size, that is 15 to 64, 35 to 44 year olds have the lowest share too. On the other hand, women aged 45 to 54 have the highest share amongst women of all ages - 53.3%.

The trend is mirrored in young adults, between the ages 15 and 24. More males engage in physical activity on a regular basis than women, about 52.8%. For the senior citizen category, people aged above 65, there is a balance in both men and women.

Overall, we see that middle aged women are more physically active their male counterparts. Whereas, young adult men are more active than women.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main contrast accurately: women exceed men in most age groups from 25 to 64, while men lead among 15–24-year-olds. The figures for ages 35–44 and women aged 45–54 are also reported correctly, and you provide an overall summary. However, some important details are incomplete or imprecise. The claim that the 35–44 group has the lowest share “amongst all ages” is only true for men; women’s lowest figure is 47.1% among those aged 65 and over. The senior group is described as balanced, although the figures are close rather than equal, and the 55–64 comparison is not discussed. More precise coverage of these patterns would make the summary more complete and developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement: it introduces the chart, discusses the main age-group comparisons, and ends with a summary. Linking phrases such as “On the other hand” and “Overall” help signal contrasts and the conclusion. The progression is generally understandable, but some connections and references are not fully clear. For example, “Amongst all ages in the sample size, that is 15 to 64” is difficult to interpret and does not clearly connect the lowest figure to the male series. The final overview also repeats the earlier contrast without adding the older-age pattern. Grouping the comparisons more systematically—for example, the youngest group, middle age groups, and oldest group—would create smoother progression and make the cohesion less dependent on basic signposting.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing the chart, including “prominent trend,” “gap,” “share,” and “engage in physical activity on a regular basis.” These choices make the main comparisons clear, and the response varies its wording rather than relying only on “more” and “less.” Some expressions are imprecise or not natural in this context, however. “The gap … is the most” would be more idiomatic as “the widest gap,” while “sample size” is not appropriate for referring to the age groups shown. “There is a balance” also overstates the similarity between the oldest groups. More precise chart language and stronger control of collocations would add flexibility and accuracy.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including the comparison “52.5% of all women, as compared to 39.5% of all men” and the contrast introduced by “Whereas.” Most sentences communicate the intended meaning, but some grammatical errors and awkward constructions remain. In the opening, “age groups and gender” needs a parallel plural form, and “between the ages 25 and 64” is missing “of.” The sentence beginning “Amongst all ages…” is structurally unclear, while the final sentence starting with “Whereas” is a fragment rather than a complete sentence. There is also a missing “than” in “more physically active their male counterparts.” Revising these patterns would improve accuracy while retaining your range of sentence structures.

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