Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The provided bar chart illustrate the proportion of males and females of various age groups who did regular physical work in the year 2010 in Australia.

It is observed that, in all age groups, except from 15 to 24 group where men are dominating women, females did additional physical activity then males. Also Female's performace shows a stable arch with increasing age group with minor ups and downs in percentage, but males activity describes a gradiant fall and then a slight rise with the age.

Males show their highest percentage of activity in age group 15 to 24 at 52.8% compared to female at 47.7%. Furthermore, males regular activity becomes less in age groups 25 to 34 and 36 to 44 at 42.2% and at 39.5% respectively. In contrast, females show rise in proportion in both age groups at 48.9% and at 52.5% respectively.

Then in age group of mid forties to mid fifies, males show a gradient uplift in their physical activity at 43.1%, but females still gave more at 53.3%. In age group of 55 to 64 and in 64 above, males gave almost same activity at 46.1% and at 46.7% respectively, followed by, women at 53% and then at 47.1% respectively, dominating men till the very end

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main comparison accurately: men lead only in the youngest group, while women have higher participation in the remaining groups. The overview also captures the broad patterns, with female activity rising to a middle-age peak and male activity falling before recovering. Most figures are reported correctly, including the youngest group and the values through ages 45–54. However, the male figure for ages 55–64 is given as 46.1%, rather than 45.1%, and “36 to 44” should be 35 to 44. The final age range is also described inconsistently as “64 above.” These details keep the report from being fully precise. A clearer overview and careful checking of every age label and figure would strengthen it further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs that compare the figures across age groups. The sequence broadly follows the chart, and contrast markers such as “In contrast” help readers track the differences between men and women. However, some linking is mechanical or awkward, particularly the repeated “Then in age group” and the long final sentence, which combines several comparisons and ends with “dominating men till the very end.” The overview’s trends are useful, but the later details could be grouped more clearly—for example, compare both sexes within each age range and use a separate sentence for the oldest group. More precise referencing and cleaner sentence boundaries would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “percentage,” “age groups,” and “compared to,” and you attempt more varied language with “gradient fall” and “slight rise.” However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing data: “physical work” does not mean regular physical activity, “additional physical activity” suggests extra activity, and “females gave more” is not an appropriate collocation. There are also spelling and word-form errors, such as “performace,” “gradiant,” and “fifies.” These do not prevent the overall message from being understood, but they make the report less precise and fluent. Prefer standard chart language such as “participation rate,” “increased,” “declined,” and “was higher than.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast clause beginning “except from 15 to 24 group” and sentences comparing trends across age groups. The main meaning is generally recoverable, but some errors in agreement, articles, and sentence construction remain. For example, “The provided bar chart illustrate” needs a singular verb, while “Female's performace shows” has an incorrect possessive form and does not agree naturally with the intended plural category. Phrases such as “in age group of mid forties” also need articles or a different grammatical pattern. The final sentence is overloaded, with several comparisons joined by commas. Check subject–verb agreement and use shorter, complete sentences to improve accuracy while retaining varied structures.

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