Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart is illustrating data about the physical activity of different age groups of both male and female gender in Austrlia for the year 2010.

All age groups of female show more physical activity than male except one age group ranging from 15 to 24 years.

As depicted by the figure 25 to 34 year aged group female particpated more in these physical movements than men as women showed 48.9 percent while men showed 42.2 percent.As other age group ranging from 35 to 44 continued to follow similar trend of women lead in physical exercises with more dominent percentage of 52.5 while men group has dropped interest in physical activities by growing age as shown by 39.5 percent. Women has remained still consious about thier fitness, even in the advanced age as group consisting of people from 45 to 54 year age, Women remained more participated toward physical activities with percentage 53.5 while men remained on 43.1 percent. Even men group showed increase in percentage age ranging from 55 to 64 with 45.1 percent which is greater than previous age group but it is still less than women of similar ages which showed 53 percent. At last of bar graph, age group 65 or more than 65 is showing very similar data for both gender with 46.7 for men and 47.1 for women.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main comparison accurately: women recorded higher participation in every age group except 15–24, and you report several key figures correctly, including 42.2% versus 48.9% for ages 25–34 and 45.1% versus 53% for ages 55–64. The account also notes the near-equal rates among people aged 65 and over. However, the overview is brief and the response mainly describes individual groups in sequence rather than clearly summarising the overall pattern. It would be stronger to state that male participation fell to a low among 35–44-year-olds before rising, while female participation generally increased to a peak in middle age and then declined. Also, the 45–54 female figure is 53.3%, not 53.5%.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response follows the age groups in a generally understandable order, and phrases such as “At last” signal that you are moving to the final category. However, the information is presented as one long paragraph, with no clear separation between an overview and supporting details. Several transitions are repetitive, particularly the repeated use of “As” and “Even,” and the sentence beginning “As other age group ranging from 35 to 44” is difficult to follow. Grouping the data into an overview and two comparison-focused paragraphs would make the progression clearer. Use linking expressions to show contrasts and trends, rather than beginning nearly every point with a similar connector.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “physical activity,” “percentage,” “age group,” and “increase,” so the chart’s subject is clear. There are also attempts at less common wording, such as “depicted” and “advanced age,” but several choices are inaccurate or unnatural and sometimes make the meaning less precise. For example, “physical movements” is not a natural substitute for regular physical activity, and “more dominent percentage” does not clearly describe a higher participation rate. Spelling errors such as “Austrlia,” “particpated,” and “thier” are noticeable. Aim for precise chart language and check spelling; simple terms such as “participation rate” and “higher than” are more effective than awkward alternatives.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “while” and “as,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in agreement and verb forms appear in phrases such as “All age groups of female show” and “Women has remained,” while “age group female particpated” lacks a clear grammatical structure. Some sentences are also overloaded with clauses, making relationships between ideas harder to follow. Punctuation is inconsistent: there is no space after the full stop in “42.2 percent.As,” and several long sentences would benefit from being divided. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and build complex sentences around a clear main clause, checking each sentence for completeness.

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