Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Below the graph represents the precentage of different age group of Australian men and women who were involved in regular physical activies during 2010.

Overall, in almost every age group the number of females involved in everyday physical activities are more as compared to males except the age group of 15 to 24, where the number of males outshined the number of females. Otherwise in all age groups the number is females is dominating.

In 2010, almost 52.8% males of age group of 15 to 24 are involved in regular physical activities wheras the number of females were just 47.7%. This is the only age group which is male dominated, except it all of the age groups were lead by females. The highest percentage of females involved in it was 53.3% from the age group of 45 to 54. Whereas, in the age group of 65 and above the percentage of males and females were almost same as 46.1% were males and 47.1% but the percentage of females were still higher than the males.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main pattern accurately: women recorded higher participation in every age group except 15–24, and you note the female peak of 53.3% among 45–54-year-olds. The comparison for the youngest group is also correct. However, the account is selective and some important features are underdeveloped: it does not describe the male low point at ages 35–44 (39.5%) or the subsequent rise, and it gives no figures for several female age groups. There is also a factual error in the final comparison: the male figure for those aged 65 and over is 46.7%, not 46.1%. A fuller summary of the contrasting age trends and accurate key figures would make the report more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction to an overview and then to specific comparisons. This makes the main message accessible. However, progression is limited because the final paragraph focuses on only a few data points, while the changes across the middle age groups are not organised or explained. Some linking is mechanical or unclear: “except it all of the age groups” and the repeated “Whereas” do not connect ideas smoothly, and “Otherwise” restates the overview rather than advancing it. Grouping the data into a paragraph about the male trend and one about the female trend, or comparing both series across age groups, would create clearer progression. Use linking expressions only where the relationship between ideas is precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary such as “percentage,” “age group,” and “regular physical activities,” so the topic is generally clear. There are also attempts at more varied wording, including “outshined” and “dominated,” but these are not natural choices for describing chart figures; “was higher than” or “had a higher participation rate” would be more suitable. Several spelling and word-form errors are noticeable, including “precentage,” “activies,” and “wheras.” Phrases such as “the number is females is dominating” are also awkward and make the comparison less precise. Aim for accurate, conventional collocations for data reporting, and check spelling and noun forms carefully. This would improve precision while retaining an adequate range for the task.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast clause beginning “except the age group of 15 to 24” and a sentence comparing the oldest group. The overall meaning is usually understandable, but some grammatical errors remain. For example, “the number of females involved … are more” has a subject–verb agreement problem and an awkward comparative construction; “the number is females is dominating” is also structurally unclear. Tense and agreement are inconsistent in “males … are involved” when reporting data from 2010, and the final comparison omits a verb after “47.1%.” Work on complete, well-formed comparisons and consistent past-tense reporting. More accurate control of these structures would make your range clearer and reduce the effort required to follow the details.

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