Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The given bar chart compares the percentage of Australian male and female in six different age groups who have done regular physical activity in the year 2010.

Overall, it can be seen that women were more physically active in most different age groups except one. However, men represented the higher percentage in the youngest age group. while the figure were almost the same for both the genders in between 65 and over people age group.

In detail, looking at the figures for men, the highest proportion have been constituted among those aged 15 to 24, at 52.8%. This figure then declined to 42.2% for the 25 to 34 age group and reached its lowest point 39.5% in between 35 to 44 age group. Following this, the percentage increased gradually, at 43.1% among those aged 45 to 54 and went to 45.1% for the 55 to 64 age group. Eventually, it rose to 46.7% almost equal to female figure for the 65 and over age group.

In contrast, women who aged 15 to 25 took part in regular physical activity and showed 47.7%. This proportion increased to 48.9% for the 25 to 34 age group then 52.5% in the 35 5o 44 age group. In addition, it reached a peak of 53.3% among women aged 45 to 54. However, It fell down slight, at 53 for the age group 55 to 64 and in the oldest age group, the figure dropped considerably to 47.1%, almost same as male percentage.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.5

The response gives a clear overview of the main patterns: women have higher participation in most age groups, men lead among 15–24-year-olds, and the oldest group has very similar figures. It also supports this summary with relevant data and accurately describes the male decline to 39.5% followed by a recovery. This is a strong, well-supported account of the chart. There are, however, a couple of small inaccuracies: the female youngest group is 15 to 24, not “15 to 25,” and the oldest figures are close but not exactly equal (46.7% for men and 47.1% for women). More precise wording about these comparisons, alongside the otherwise effective selection of key features, would make the report more consistently exact.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response is organised effectively into an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs describing the male and female trends. The progression within each data paragraph is generally easy to follow, and linking expressions such as “Following this,” “In contrast,” and “However” help signal changes. This clear overall organisation is characteristic of a well-controlled response. Some connections are less smooth or slightly mechanical, however: “In addition” does not clearly express the relationship between the female figures, and “Eventually” is not the most natural marker for the final age group. The overview also has a sentence break after “one” that disrupts the flow. More precise transitions and cleaner punctuation would make cohesion more flexible and unobtrusive.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

There is an adequate range of vocabulary for describing chart data, including “declined,” “lowest point,” “increased gradually,” “peak,” and “dropped considerably.” These choices help communicate the overall movements and show some willingness to use less basic language. However, several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “the highest proportion have been constituted,” “women who aged,” and “fell down slight.” The phrase “took part … and showed 47.7%” is also imprecise for reporting a percentage. There are spelling and typing slips, including “5o” for “to.” These do not prevent understanding, but more accurate collocations and consistent word forms are needed for greater flexibility and precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses introduced by “who” and “while,” and most of the data remains understandable. Some grammatical errors are present but rarely obstruct the message. For example, “women were more physically active … except one” is followed by a sentence fragment beginning “while,” and “the figure were” has a subject–verb agreement error. Other issues include “women who aged 15 to 25,” “reached its lowest point 39.5%” (missing a suitable preposition or linking structure), and inconsistent capitalisation after full stops, as in “However, It.” To improve, check agreement, sentence boundaries, and the grammatical patterns used to introduce figures, while retaining the range of sentence structures already attempted.

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