Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of how men and women living in Australia from different age groups performed regular physical exercise in 2010.

Overall, it is evident that men in age group 15 to 24 had the highest percentage among male category while women that falls between 45 to 54 dominated the female category.

Regarding the percentage of female that are involved in regular physical exercise, women within age bracket of 45 to 54 had the highest percentage at 53.3%, followed by age group 55 to 64 at 53% and age group 35 to 44 at 52.5%. Meanwhile, women that falls within age 25 to 34 reported 48.9 whereas 15 to 24 recorded 47.7. However, regular exercise among women around 65 and over reported the least percentage among the female category at 47.1%.

Turning to men categories, age group 15 to 24 had 52.8% which is greater than the percentage of female, followed by 46.7 among age 65 and over and 45.1% among age 55 to 64. Similarly, men from age 45 to 54 and 25 to 34 recorded 43.1% and 42.2% respectively whereas male within the age bracket 35 to 44 recorded the least percentage men at 39.5%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both sexes and all six age groups, and the figures you report are accurate. The overview identifies the male peak among 15–24-year-olds and the female peak among 45–54-year-olds; the detailed paragraphs also give useful comparisons, including the male low of 39.5% and the female high of 53.3%. This provides a relevant account of the chart. However, the overview is limited to the highest figures and does not capture the main overall pattern: women were more active than men in every age group except 15–24, while male participation fell and then rose with age. Adding this broad comparison would make the key features more fully developed and the summary more selective.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response is organised clearly into an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for women and men. The progression from the female figures to the male figures is easy to follow, and signposts such as “Overall,” “Meanwhile,” and “Turning to” help guide the reader. This is a sound, logical structure. Some linking is slightly mechanical, however, and the repeated listing of age groups makes the body read more like a sequence of figures than a comparison. For example, the female paragraph could group the three values around 53% together, then contrast them with the lower figures. A direct comparison between the sexes across age groups would also strengthen the flow and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use an adequate range of task-related vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age bracket,” “dominated,” and “recorded,” and the meaning remains clear. There is some variation in how you describe the data, rather than relying on one verb throughout. However, several expressions are awkward or imprecise for chart reporting: “the percentage of how men and women…performed” and “women that falls between 45 to 54” are not natural formulations. “Dominated the female category” is also less precise than saying this group had the highest rate. Aim for accurate collocations such as “the proportion who exercised regularly” and “women aged 45–54.” This greater precision, alongside your existing range, would make the vocabulary more flexible and natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including comparisons with “while” and “whereas,” and most sentences communicate the intended figures. Some grammatical errors remain. For example, “women that falls” has a subject–verb agreement error, and “women within age bracket” is missing an article. In “women that falls between 45 to 54,” the relative clause and age-range construction are also faulty; write “women aged 45–54.” There are occasional punctuation and spacing issues, such as the extra space before “women” in the female paragraph. These errors rarely obscure meaning, but more consistent control of agreement, articles, and sentence patterns would improve accuracy while retaining your range of structures.

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