Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010 Overall trend the young people's doing regular physical activity as compare to old people's

Initially, The Values of 15 to 24 male who doing regular physical activity in 2010 its upto 58.8 percentage However, the age of 15 to 24 woman who Doing regular physical activity in 2010 was 47.7 percentage

In addition, The age of 25 to 34 male was doing regular physical activity in 2010 was showed downfall its upto 42.2 percetage

However, The value of woman who doing regular physical activity showed rise in 2010 its upto 48.9 percentage

Furthermore, The age of 35 to 44 and 45 to 54 the value of male was showed downfall its upto 39.5 percentage on the onther side the value of woman was increase It went upto 52.5 in 2010 who doing regular physical activity

Following to this , The age of 55 to 64 and 65 to over the value of male was showed minior increase its upto 45.1 percentage on the onther side the value of woman was increase It went upto 53 in 2010 who doing regular physical activity

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the chart’s subject and make some relevant comparisons between men and women across the age groups. However, the overview is unclear and inaccurate: “young people's” activity compared with “old people's” does not capture the main pattern, which is that men are higher only in the youngest group, while women lead in every other group. There are also important data errors. The male figure for ages 15–24 is 52.8%, not 58.8%, and the female figure for ages 45–54 is 53.3%, not 52.5%; the latter value belongs to ages 35–44. The final comparison also omits the 65-and-over figures. Select the key trends accurately and give a concise overview before describing details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response follows the age groups in sequence and uses linking expressions such as “In addition,” “However,” and “Furthermore,” so the reader can see that you are making comparisons. However, the information is presented as one continuous block rather than in clearly organised paragraphs, and there is no distinct overview to guide the reader. Several transitions are repetitive or do not show the relationship between the figures clearly. For example, “Following to this” introduces the final age groups, but the sentence combines two groups without clearly distinguishing their values. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview, and one or two detail paragraphs, and use comparisons to connect related figures rather than relying on repeated transition words.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age,” “male,” “woman,” “rise,” and “increase,” which helps communicate the topic. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repeated or used unnaturally, such as “who doing regular physical activity,” “showed downfall,” and “on the onther side.” Spelling errors, including “percetage,” “onther,” and “minior,” also reduce accuracy. Choose precise verbs and collocations for describing data, and vary them where appropriate. For example, you could say that a figure “fell to” a value or that women’s participation “peaked at” a particular percentage. Check spelling and use “men” and “women” consistently when referring to the groups.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to describe changes and make comparisons, but sentence structures are limited and many sentences contain errors that make the relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Examples include “the age of 25 to 34 male was doing … was showed downfall” and “the value of woman was increase.” These need clearer subjects and correctly formed verbs, such as “The figure for men aged 25–34 fell to 42.2%” and “The figure for women increased.” Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, particularly after the opening sentence and around transitions. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use past-tense forms consistently to report the 2010 data.

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