Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart deptics the percentage of Australian men and women doing regular physical activity in diffrent age group.

Overall, mens are doing more in early young age with more then 50% but the trend of womens are going high in their middle age and above.

The maximum percentage of mens in the age group of 15 to 24 in 52.8% but same group of females have 47.7%. The age of 25 to 34 mens are doing less exsercise which 42.2% and the females of this age braket are more then mens with 48.9%.

The most least age group of males are 35 to 44 with 39.5% and femlaes of this group icreaed to 52.5%.

The maximum people in females are doing workout is 53% and also age of 55 to 64 of ladies doing exsercise with 53% but mens of these age period are 43.1% and45.1%.

The final age group of male and females is 65 and above are almost similar to each other with 46.7 mens and 47.1% in females

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main contrast: men have the highest participation in the youngest group, while women exceed men in the other age groups. You also report several accurate figures, including 52.8% for young men, 39.5% for men aged 35–44, and 47.1% for women aged 65 and over. This gives the response a relevant overview and supports its comparisons. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: the female peak is 53.3% among 45–54-year-olds, not 53% as stated, and the figures 43.1% and 45.1% are assigned to the wrong age groups in the sentence about women aged 55–64. Develop the overview more precisely and check that each figure is matched to its group.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and a sequence of age-group comparisons. This helps the reader follow the main subject, and phrases such as “The final age group” signal a shift to the last category. However, the body does not progress consistently through the data: the sentence about women aged 55–64 also includes figures for men aged 45–54 and 55–64, making the comparisons difficult to track. Some links are mechanical or unclear, and the final sentence is joined awkwardly to the preceding point. Group the figures by age range or by sex, and use clear linking phrases to show how each comparison relates to the overview.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing the chart, including “percentage,” “age group,” “trend,” and “maximum.” However, the range is limited, and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or informal for an academic report. For example, “doing workout” and “doing less exsercise” are not natural ways to describe the data, while “most least age group” is unclear. Spelling errors such as “deptics,” “diffrent,” and “femlaes” also reduce accuracy. Use standard chart language consistently, such as “the proportion who exercised” or “participation was lowest,” and proofread spelling and word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer comparisons, and the reader can generally understand the intended meaning. However, grammatical control is uneven, particularly in sentence structure and agreement. For example, “Overall, mens are doing more” has an incorrect plural form and an awkward verb construction; “The maximum percentage of mens … in 52.8%” is missing a suitable linking verb; and “The final age group … are almost similar” has a subject–verb agreement problem. Punctuation and spacing also need attention, as in “43.1% and45.1%.” Practise forming complete comparison sentences with accurate subjects and verbs, and check articles, plurals, and punctuation before submitting.

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