Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The following bar graph illustrates that in 2010 how many Australian men and women did regular physical exercise in different age groups.

There are six age groups showing different ratio.

Placing a look, the teenager boys do more physical activities than the girls. Boys do about 52% while girls do about 47.7%. Secondly, people of age 25 to 34 male's do about 42.2% while female's do 48.9% exercise. Thirdly, people of age 35 to 44, the ratio of male's are reducing significantly. Males do 39.5% while female's do 52.5%.

Similarly, people from age 45 to 54, 43.1% of male's and 63.3% of female's. On the other side, people of age 55 to 64, similarly, ratio of male's is 45.1% and female's is 53%. Taking last age group in consideration, people of age 65 or above, their is a slight difference in the ratio. Male's ratio is 48.7% and female's is 47.5%.

To sum up, we should do physical activities daily to be healthy and strong.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the chart’s subject and compare men and women across the age groups, including several relevant figures. However, the response mainly lists values rather than selecting and summarising the key patterns, and it lacks a clear overview of the main trends. Some figures are also inaccurate: female participation at ages 45–54 is 53.3%, not 63.3%, and the figures for those aged 65 and over are 46.7% for men and 47.1% for women, not 48.7% and 47.5%. The final advice about exercising daily is not supported by the chart and does not summarise its data. To strengthen the response, give an overview—for example, women were more active in most age groups, while men led only among 15–24-year-olds—and report the comparisons accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic sequence through the six age groups, and paragraph breaks help separate the introduction, comparisons and ending. Linking expressions such as “Secondly,” “Similarly” and “Taking last age group in consideration” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, the progression is largely a repetitive list, rather than a clear grouping of the main trends. Some transitions are awkward or do not express a meaningful relationship, and “Similarly” is repeated without clarifying what is being compared. The concluding sentence shifts to general health advice instead of drawing together the chart’s findings. Organise the body around the main pattern—such as men’s figures and women’s figures, or the age groups where one sex leads—and use concise, precise links between comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “age groups,” “physical activities,” “ratio” and “slight difference,” so the reader can generally understand the subject. However, the range is limited and several choices are unnatural or imprecise for describing a chart. “Teenager boys” does not accurately name the 15–24 age group, while “ratio” is repeatedly used where “percentage” or “proportion” is intended. Phrases such as “Placing a look” and “Taking last age group in consideration” are awkward and make the description less fluent. Aim for standard data-reporting language and avoid repeating the same terms. For example, describe figures as “participation rates” and use verbs such as “rose,” “fell” or “remained higher” to express trends clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response includes mostly simple statements and attempts some longer constructions, such as “people of age 35 to 44, the ratio of male's are reducing significantly.” However, the limited range and frequent errors make several sentences awkward or difficult to follow. Examples include the opening construction “illustrates that in 2010 how many,” the incomplete sentence “There are six age groups showing different ratio,” and the agreement and tense problems in “the ratio of male's are reducing.” There are also errors in possessive forms and sentence construction, as in “female's do 48.9% exercise.” Practise forming direct comparison sentences with a clear subject and verb, such as “Among 25–34-year-olds, 48.9% of women exercised, compared with 42.2% of men.”

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