Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The bar chart presents the proportion of various age groups of Australian men and women who did regular physical work in 2010.

Overall, the proportions of women who did regular physical activities were higher than men in most of the age groups. In men age groups, this trend of doing regular physical activities is in shape of lower curve, while in women, it is a upper curve.

Starting with the men physical activities. Above an half (52.8%) individuals in 15 to 24 age group did regular physical work and it was the highest percentage comparing to the other groups which then steeply dropped for 25 to 34 age group at 42.2% and in following group 35 to 44, further fell to 39.5% which was lowest proportion among other age groups. After this, 45 to 54 age group slightly recovered back to 43.1% and the next age group between 55 to 64 further increased to 45.1 and the last age group of 65 and above had accounted for 46.7%.

Turning to women physical activities. It started at 47.7% in 15 to 24 age group which steadily increased to 48.9% in 25 to 34 age group. The following age group between 35 to 44 significantly increased their proportion at 52.5% which then went to its peak of 53.3% for age group 45 to 54 before slightly fell at 53% in age group 55 to 64. In the last group of 65 and above, the proportion was dramatically decreased to 47.1%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You select the main patterns and support them with accurate figures. The overview correctly notes that women were more active in most age groups, and the body identifies the male low point at 35–44 and the female peak at 45–54. The reported values match the chart. To make the overview more precise, state the key exception explicitly: men had the higher rate only among 15–24-year-olds. The descriptions of the two trends as a “lower curve” and an “upper curve” are unclear and do not communicate the comparisons as effectively as a direct summary of the rise and fall in each series. Overall, the response covers the task clearly, with the main features selected and supported, though the overview could be sharper.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response is organised effectively into an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for men and women. The sequence within each group is easy to follow, and transitions such as “After this” and “Turning to women” help guide the reader through the data. This clear progression supports the comparisons and makes the report straightforward to understand. Some linking is a little mechanical, particularly the repeated “age group” phrasing and the step-by-step use of “which then” and “the following.” The overview’s “lower curve” and “upper curve” also do not clearly connect to the specific trends described later. Use more direct comparisons between the sexes and vary transitions to make cohesion more flexible.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing chart data, including “proportion,” “steeply dropped,” “recovered,” “increased,” and “peak.” These choices help convey changes and comparisons, and the meaning remains clear. However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural: “physical work” does not mean physical activity, “in shape of lower curve” is unclear, and “accounted for 46.7%” is awkward for describing a rate. Repetition of “age group” and “proportion” also limits flexibility. Choose precise chart language such as “participated in regular physical activity,” “declined,” and “stood at,” and use “rate” or “figure” where appropriate. This would make the vocabulary more natural and precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including clauses with “which then” and time-sequencing phrases, and the overall meaning is generally understandable. However, some grammatical errors recur in sentence construction and agreement. For example, “In men age groups” needs a possessive or a different structure, while “it is a upper curve” has an article error and an unclear reference. In “the following age group … increased their proportion,” the singular subject does not agree with “their,” and “before slightly fell” is missing a subject. Several long sentences also need clearer punctuation to separate the data points. Practise accurate articles, agreement, and complete clauses, and break some extended sentences into shorter units while retaining varied structures.

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