Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The chart below illustrates the percentage of Australian male and female of different age groups, who participated in physical activities, in 2010.

Overall, female contributions was recorded higher than males, accept just early age group. 35 to 64 years age group females was highly active among other age groups. 15 to 24 age group male accounted for the largest percentage.

Regarding male, 15 to 24 age group was highly active by showing 52.8% of physical activities. Male age group from 45 to 54 years represented just around 40%, which rose in 55 to 64 and 65 and over age group to 45.1% and 46.7% respectively.

In terms of female, age group from 35 to 64 years showed the highest contributions toward physical activities, which was from 52% to 53%. 25 to 34 age group reserved 48.9% , which followed by 15 to 24 of 47.7% and 65 and over for 46.7%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main contrast: men have the highest participation in the youngest group, while women lead in most other age groups. You also report several relevant figures, including 52.8% for young men and 48.9% for women aged 25–34. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear. Men aged 45–54 recorded 43.1%, not “around 40%,” and the figure given for women aged 65 and over should be 47.1%, not 46.7%. The overview also says women were higher except in the “early age group,” which is imprecise: men lead only among those aged 15–24. A clearer overview and more accurate comparisons across the age groups would make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, an overview and separate paragraphs for male and female figures. This makes the information generally easy to follow. The progression within the detail paragraphs is also mostly logical, and phrases such as “Regarding male” and “In terms of female” signal a change of focus. However, some links are awkward or unclear, particularly “which followed by 15 to 24” and the overview’s “accept just early age group.” The male paragraph also skips the 25–44 figures, so the comparison is not fully developed. Use clearer transitions and organise the data consistently by age group or by sex to strengthen the progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age group,” “represented” and “highest.” However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural for describing chart data. “Female contributions” and “highest contributions toward physical activities” suggest contributions rather than participation rates, while “reserved 48.9%” does not express the intended meaning. “Highly active” also describes people rather than the proportion shown. These choices do not prevent the reader from understanding the general message, but they reduce precision. Prefer standard chart language such as “the proportion of women who exercised” or “participation stood at,” and use “men” and “women” consistently when referring to people.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including clauses with “which” and comparisons between age groups. The main information is usually understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “female contributions was recorded higher than males” has problems with agreement and comparison structure, and “35 to 64 years age group females was” has incorrect noun phrasing and subject–verb agreement. In “which rose in 55 to 64 and 65 and over age group,” the sentence structure and article use make the relationship difficult to follow. There are also punctuation and spacing slips around commas. Build comparisons with a clear subject and verb—for example, “The rate for women was higher than that for men”—and check agreement and articles.

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