Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illustrate the percentage ofAustralian men and women who did daily physical activity in different age groups in 2010.

Overall, the women percentage of physical activity were the highest over the years. The men were lowest whole the years.

The male are highest at 52.8 and the women at 47.7 in the age of 15 to 24 years. Meanwhile, the women were rosed at 48.9 and men decreased at 42.2 in the age of 25 to 34 years. The women also high in the age of 35 to 44 and men are lowest at 52.5 and 39.5 respectively.

The female also climbed at 53.3 and men fell at 43.1 in the age of 45 to 54. Similarly, The women also increase at 53 and men drooped at 45.1 in the age of 55 to 64. In the age of 65 and over the men are women both were indenticaly same at 46.7 and 47.1 respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You include figures for all six age groups and make relevant male–female comparisons, so the reader can follow the broad pattern. However, the overview is inaccurate: women were not highest in every group, since men led among 15–24-year-olds (52.8% versus 47.7%). The claim that men were “lowest whole the years” is also too broad; their lowest figure was 39.5% among 35–44-year-olds, after which it rose. Some details are misreported or unclear: at 35–44, 52.5% is the women’s figure, not a general description of both groups being “high.” To improve, give a precise overview of the changing gender pattern and report the key peaks, lows, and crossover accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic structure: an introduction, an overview, and a sequence of age-group comparisons. This gives the information some organisation, and phrases such as “Meanwhile” and “Similarly” attempt to connect details. However, progression is largely a list of figures, and the repeated pattern of “women … and men …” makes the account mechanical. Some links are inaccurate or confusing, particularly “The women also high … and men are lowest at 52.5 and 39.5 respectively,” where the comparison is difficult to interpret. Grouping the younger ages separately from the older ages, and using clearer references such as “the female rate” and “the male figure,” would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age groups,” “decreased,” and “climbed,” and the main subject remains understandable. However, the range is limited and several noticeable word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors make parts awkward or unclear. For example, “women percentage of physical activity” is not a natural way to describe the data, while “were rosed,” “drooped,” and “indenticaly” are inaccurate forms. “Daily physical activity” also changes the chart’s meaning, which refers to regular activity. Aim for precise reporting expressions such as “the proportion of women who exercised regularly” and use verbs like “rose,” “fell,” or “stood at” accurately. Check spelling and avoid repeating the same basic comparison wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer comparisons, and the reader can usually identify the age groups and figures being discussed. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence construction sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “The bar chart illustrate,” “The women percentage … were,” and “The male are highest.” The sentence beginning “The women also high” lacks a correctly formed verb, while “the men are women both were” has an unclear structure. Practise forming accurate comparative sentences with a clear subject and verb—for example, “The female rate rose to 48.9%, while the male rate fell to 42.2%.”

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