Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The bar graph compares how many males and females of every age group were doing regular physical activity in Australia in 2010.

Overall, females were more into physical activity than men in almost every age group. Whereas, boys only in their teenage were more involved in physical activity than teenage girls.

In the age group of 15 to 24, 52.8% of boys are involved in physical activity, whereas only 47.7% girls were actively doing physical work. In the age group of 25 to 34 and 35 to 44, percentage of males involved in physical activity decreased continusouly to 42.2% and 39.5% while number for females increased to 48.9% and 52.5%.

Similarly, for the rest of the age groups number for females stays higher than men. In the age group of 45 to 54 and 55 to 64, women were seen more actively involved in physical activity, with 53.3% and 53% for women, and 43.1% and 45.1% for men. In contrast, at the age of 65 and over the ratio becomes almost the same, however more women were still actively doing physical activity.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The response identifies the main pattern accurately: women recorded higher participation in all age groups except 15–24, and the figures for those aged 65 and over were close. It also supports these points with relevant data, including the male low of 39.5% at ages 35–44 and the female peak of 53.3% at ages 45–54. This gives the summary a clear overview and adequate numerical support. To make the account more fully developed, describe the overall shape of both trends: men’s rate falls and then rises after age 35–44, while women’s rises to middle age before declining. The phrase “almost every age group” is accurate, but the overview could state these contrasting patterns more explicitly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response is arranged in a clear sequence: an introduction and overview are followed by comparisons across the age groups. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “whereas,” and “In contrast” help signal relationships, and the figures are generally grouped sensibly. However, cohesion is not always smooth or precise. “Whereas” begins a fragment after the overview, and “Similarly” does not clearly describe the relationship between the preceding and following comparisons. The repeated phrase “In the age group” also makes the progression somewhat mechanical. For stronger organisation, group the age ranges by trend—for example, the younger groups and then the middle-to-older groups—and use concise references such as “this figure” or “the rate” where the meaning is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the chart’s main comparisons, with useful terms such as “decreased,” “increased,” “ratio,” and “actively involved.” However, several choices are imprecise or unnatural for a formal data summary. “Boys” and “girls” are unsuitable for adult age groups, while “more into physical activity” is informal. “Doing physical work” changes the meaning from exercise, and “the ratio becomes almost the same” is not the natural way to describe similar percentages. There is also a spelling error in “continusouly.” Aim for precise, consistent terms such as “men,” “women,” “participation rate,” and “regular physical activity,” and avoid varying the wording in ways that alter the chart’s meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple and complex forms, including comparisons with “whereas” and a longer sentence describing changes across two age groups. Most meanings remain clear, but some grammatical errors are noticeable. “Whereas, boys only in their teenage were…” is an incomplete and awkwardly punctuated construction; it could be joined to the preceding sentence or rewritten as a complete sentence. Tense and agreement are inconsistent in “52.8% of boys are involved” and “only 47.7% girls were,” and the latter also needs “of.” The phrase “percentage of males” would normally take an article or plural form, and “number for females stays” has an agreement problem. More consistent past-tense reporting and careful checking of articles and verb forms would improve accuracy.

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