Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar graph illustrates the information about the proportion of Australian male and female of age groups start from 15 to 65 and above who did physical exercise in 2010.

It is evident from the graph,the percentage of men who did exercise was higher whose age group was 15 to 24 whereas,the proportion of men and women were almost same who were 65 years old or above .

It was highest percentage of 15 to 24 age group of men who did physical activity as compared to women. It was 52.8 and 47.7 of both gender respectively. Moreover, the percentage of men dropped down at the age of 25 to 34. It was 42.2 and women did exercise more than men,it was 48.9.there was a huge difference between men and women who did physical activity at the age of 35 to 44, it was around 14%.

In addition,the proportion of women increased at the age of 45 to 54 it reached at 53.3% similarly men's percentage risen too.The proportion of both gender who did physical exercise at the age of 55 to 64 were 45.1 and 53% respectively. Last but not least ,the proportion of men amd women were almost same when they were 65 years old and above.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main comparison that men lead in the youngest group, while women are more active in most other age groups, and you include several accurate figures, such as 52.8% versus 47.7% for ages 15–24. However, the overview is incomplete: it does not clearly summarise the overall pattern that men’s rate falls and then rises, while women’s rate generally rises to middle age before declining. The claim of a “huge difference” of around 14% at ages 35–44 is inaccurate; the gap is 13 percentage points, but the wording should be precise, and the actual values (39.5% and 52.5%) are not given there. The final group is described as almost equal, which is accurate. Select and summarise the key trends more clearly, then support them with precise comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable progression from an introduction to an overview and then comparisons across age groups. Linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “In addition,” and “Last but not least” help signal movement through the data. However, the organisation is sometimes mechanical, and several comparisons are crowded into long sentences, particularly the discussion of ages 25–34 and 35–44. Punctuation and spacing also make connections harder to follow, as in “graph,the” and “too.The.” The overview repeats the point about the youngest and oldest groups rather than providing a concise summary of the full pattern. Grouping the first two age bands together and then the remaining bands, with clear topic sentences, would make the progression more coherent and reduce repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “percentage,” “increased,” and “dropped,” and the reader can generally understand the comparisons. However, the range is limited by repeated use of “did exercise” and “did physical activity,” and some choices are unnatural or imprecise. For example, “the percentage of men who did exercise was higher whose age group was 15 to 24” is awkward, while “dropped down” is less suitable than a concise trend verb such as “fell.” There are also spelling errors, including “amd,” and “gender” is not the most natural term when comparing men and women. Aim for more precise collocations and vary your language without sacrificing accuracy.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “whereas” and “who,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in agreement and sentence construction appear in phrases such as “the percentage of Australian male and female,” “the proportion of men and women were,” and “It was highest percentage.” Articles and prepositions are also often missing or misplaced, as in “at the age of 25 to 34” and “it reached at 53.3%.” Several sentences run together without appropriate punctuation, for example the sentence beginning “Moreover, the percentage of men dropped down.” These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise accurate comparison structures, article use, and sentence boundaries before adding more complex clauses.

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