Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart illustrates the amount of Australian men and women who participated in regular physical activity divided in multiple age groups in 2010.

Overall, it is clearly visible that majority of partcipation in physical excercise for men was from pre adulthood to young adult hood and minority came from post adulthood. Besides for women the most active age group was during the mature age. and was the least activie group for females was age group of pre mature age

In 2010, About 52.8% men and 47.7% women participated in physical excercises from the age group of 15-24. From the age group of yound mature belonging in 25-34 about 42.2 men and 48.9 women took part in physical excercises on daily basis. At the age group of early mature between 35-44 men were less active than women at around 39.5% and 52.5%. In the age group of 45-54 participation in for women was at peak at 53.3% and for men it rose a bit at 43.1% only. In 55-6age group participation for men increased by 2% and decreased by .3% for women. And in the age group of 65+ the participation rate was 46.7 and 47.1 for both male and femal_

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the chart’s main subject and include figures across all six age groups, with several accurate comparisons—for example, women’s activity peaked at 53.3% among 45–54-year-olds, while men’s lowest figure was 39.5% among 35–44-year-olds. The overview also attempts to identify broad age patterns. However, it is unclear or inaccurate in places: men’s highest participation was among 15–24-year-olds, not broadly “from pre adulthood to young adult hood,” and women’s lowest rate was among 65-and-over women (47.1%), not the “pre mature age” group. The final comparison is useful, but the change figures for ages 55–64 are not clearly anchored to the preceding age group. Make the overview more precise and select the key highs, lows, and gender crossover clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and a chronological account of the age groups. This gives the reader a basic route through the information, and phrases such as “In the age group of 45-54” help signal transitions. However, the overview is difficult to follow because its comparisons are expressed unclearly, and the sentence beginning “Besides for women” contains a broken construction. The body also relies repeatedly on “In the age group” and “At the age group,” making progression mechanical. The final sentence about increases and decreases would be clearer if it explicitly compared the 55–64 figures with those for 45–54. Grouping the data into male and female trends, or into younger and older groups, would create a more purposeful progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “participated,” “active,” “participation rate,” and “peak,” so the topic is generally clear. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are awkward, such as “amount of men and women,” “majority of participation,” and “took part … on daily basis.” Some spelling errors—“partcipation,” “excercises,” “yound,” and “femal”—also reduce accuracy and polish. The labels “pre adulthood,” “young mature,” and “early mature” are not natural ways to describe the chart’s age bands and may confuse the reader. Use standard age-group labels and precise terms such as “proportion” or “percentage” when reporting data. More accurate collocations would make the description clearer and more appropriately academic.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer comparative sentences, and most of the figures remain understandable. However, some sentence structures are incomplete or faulty. For example, “Besides for women the most active age group was during the mature age. and was the least activie group…” lacks a clear subject and does not form a complete comparison. In “about 42.2 men and 48.9 women took part,” the percentages need grammatical marking, while “participation in for women” contains an unnecessary preposition. Capitalisation after full stops and punctuation around the final sentence also need attention. Practise building complete comparison patterns, such as “The figures were X% for men and Y% for women,” and check that each sentence has a clear subject and verb. Greater control of these patterns would improve accuracy.

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