Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 12 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart shows the percentage of men and women in different age groups, Who did regular physical activity in the year 2010.

The bar chart shows that the percentage of younger age groups of men did more exercise than the percentage of young womens. As the age group increases womens tend to do more regular physical activity than mens. Then the older age groups physical activity is almost similar.

The age group 15-24 men tends to do more physical exercise than women. As, The age increases 25-34 men involve themselves to their jobs and stops being more interested in physical exercise. However, almost half the percentage of womens age group does exercise. Then the age group 35-44 men shows critically less percentage than womens. The age group 65 and over group of mens and womens show almost similar percentage of doing the regular physical activity.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the broad pattern that men lead in the youngest group, while women are more active across several middle age groups, and you note that the oldest group is similar. However, the account is incomplete and includes an unsupported explanation: the claim that men aged 25–34 become less interested because of work is not shown by the chart. The response also omits key comparisons and figures, including the female peak at 45–54 (53.3%) and the male low at 35–44 (39.5%). The overview is present but vague, and the response is 17 words below the required minimum, limiting the detail available to summarise the data fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic structure, moving from an opening statement to a general summary and then age-group details. Some linking words, such as “However” and “Then,” help signal relationships. However, progression is not consistently clear: “Then the older age groups physical activity is almost similar” is difficult to connect to the preceding comparison, and the final paragraph repeats points already made in the overview. The discussion would be easier to follow if you grouped the data into clear comparisons—for example, the youngest group, the middle groups where women lead, and the oldest group—and used more precise references to the age ranges. Avoid using “Then” repeatedly as a general-purpose connector.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “percentage,” “age group,” and “regular physical activity,” so the basic meaning is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repetitive or imprecise, such as “do more exercise,” “does exercise,” and “percentage of doing the regular physical activity.” Some word forms and collocations are awkward, including “young womens” and “men involve themselves to their jobs.” These choices make the description less natural and occasionally obscure the intended comparison. Aim for concise chart language such as “were more physically active,” “the proportion,” and “participation declined,” while using accurate forms such as “women” and “men’s.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with clauses, for example, “As the age group increases womens tend to do more regular physical activity than mens.” This shows some effort to vary sentence structure, and the main ideas can usually be understood. However, errors occur frequently in agreement, articles, punctuation, and sentence construction. Examples include “The age group 15-24 men tends,” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “As, The age increases,” where the comma and capitalisation disrupt the sentence. The opening also capitalises “Who” unnecessarily. Practise forming complete comparisons with clear subjects and verbs, and check punctuation and sentence boundaries before submitting.

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